QUOTE (Psyche @ May 3 10, 05:59 )
Hi Eisa!
It's the first time I've seen this poem, so I need to think about it a little. You've had so many helpful suggestions and even made 2 revs, that I'm sure to crit somebody else's useful pointers without realising.
Perhaps I better return and not read the whole thread, just nit here & there hoping nobody takes offense! I see that the comments ended in 2008..
That said, it's a beautiful piece and I love the way you've alternated between past & present, even tho' the narrator finds it hard not to reminisce and needs to be shaken back to reality.
Congrats, I'll be back asap.
Syl***
Hi Syl
It's so good to see you here. Yes, this was completed in 2008 and I thought I'd done the final revision when someone suggested it needed a few more reminiscences - which I did. But then no one commented on the final tweaking, so I thought I'd like some opinions, before I can say 'Finished! LOL!
I'd be glad to hear your thoughts.
Snow