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Athena
Posted on: Feb 7 05, 01:50


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QUOTE(Just Daniel @ Feb. 03 2005, 04:55)
Hi Daniel,

This is poignantly marvelous!  I feel every word ... every line.  I think most of us have felt we've been "abandoned" by God at certain times in our lives.


Voice in the Dark

I’m feeling He’s abandoned me;
a spiral down won’t set me free... what do you mean in this line?
I need to cling,
remembering, when I’ve no sight,
the things He’s shown me in the light...  
in darkness, sing.
How well I identify with these four lines ....

“How can you sing!” a voice may blare.
“It’s obvious He doesn’t care;
just face the facts.”   Ahhh I hear the enemie's words here as he works on all of us!
Amid the drone of dark despair,
a still, small Voice is always there;
on this I act.   Yes, wonderfully expressed ...

God is near the broken-hearted,
hears before a prayer is started...
been there too...
near the one whose spirit’s crushed;
“I’ll never leave you.”  List now… hushed...
He cries with you.  

© Daniel J Ricketts 03 Feb 2005
Psalm 34:18



I think John's words about this poem being very uplifting is something I thoroughly agree with.  It began in despair, and then hearing Him through tender whispers, we read how He lifts, strengthens, and gives us hope and promise for tomorrow.


Brilliantly written, my friend,

Blessings,  Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Jun 22 04, 23:55


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Scribbles
are what I draw
no matter how I try
to create a work of artsy
word lore.

© D R Harris - 22 June, 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Jun 13 04, 11:37


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And sleep
comes upon us
although we thought it wouldn't;
in gentle slumber we're renewed
afresh

©  D R Reinhart - 13 June, 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Jun 8 04, 02:30


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Gosh, it's been months since I've tried one of these.  Well, I'll give it a go ...

"Go down!"
I yell at weeds
that seem to leap from ground
casting their fluffly seed abroad,
e'er more

© D Reinhart - June 8, 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Jun 3 04, 01:30


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Thanks so much to all of you who showed me so kindly that you care!

A brief update:  David and I were indeed married for "Time and All Eternity", as is our belief, on March 19, 2004.  We left the next day for our long and leisurely honeymoon ... almost four weeks!  

We first took a private room on a train 3,000 miles across the nation.  We spent a week in Ohio and Michigan so David's family and friends could get to know me a little bit.  Then we took his already packed van and drove home here to Oregon .. another 3,000 miles.

We saw so many GORgeous sights we were profoundly touched by how much love our Heavenly Father has for us to give us such a glorious land to live in!  He could have stuck us all on a barren planet, but he chose to give us magnificent varieties of flora and fauna beyond words to describe.

David has undergone his really serious surgery.  They had to remove 2 tumors instead of 1, with one of them on its way to becoming cancer.  Then from the other side of his colon they had to remove diverticuli that were almost ready to burst!  His mother died from this due to bleeding to death.

It was very extensive.  He was in hospital for 8 days and will not be able to do anything strenuous for at least 6 months.  He still has pain spasms that are horrendous.

His prescriptions alone come to over $400.00 per month and we have no insurance due to serious pre-existing health conditions.  But, we found a way to defer 25% to 80% of all our med's costs.  If anyone else wants to know how to do that, (only available in the states) just let me know.

We're doing pretty well.  Instead of a regular garden this year we're growing our flowers and vegies in pots, pots, and MORE pots!  I told my church leader we had a pot garden and he told me, "Uhhhh I think we need to have a talk!"  I quickly explained what I'd meant.  LOL

It's difficult for me to be much of a mod in here right now.  I regret to say I don't know if I ever will be able to do much in the furture either as we've begun a home business that is keeping us extrememly busy.

Thanks for all your prayers and caring.

Hugs,

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 14 04, 17:31


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Thank you so much, Lady Grace!  What a neat haiku!  Yessss ... everlasting love.


Everlasting love;
if love can last forever
we'll make it happen

© D R Harris - 14 March 2004


Yes, yes, I know this isn't the interactive thread, but I simply HAD to do it!:sun:
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 06:23


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CONGRATS
also due
for those who remain loyal,
holding treasured friendships closely,
nurtured

© D R Harris - 13 March 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 06:10


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New Self

She's high
on life and love,
leaving sorrow behind;
she's reaching out for better days
ahead

© D R Harris - 11 March 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 06:02


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Very well done, Jessica!  .......... and what an interesting picture you paint of an equally interesting woman!  Wonderfully achieved!

Let's see what I can come up with,

Blessings,

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 05:57


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Thump
thump, thump
beat my heart
as he drew near;
teachers often annoyed or frightened me.
School is tough for the ADHD child;
irritating,
difficult,
boring,
waste

© D R Harris - 13 March 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 03:27


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I LOVE your tetractys, Jessica!  

Mine will pale in the warm glow of yours, but I will attempt one anyway.

Blessings,  Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 03:23


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To raise their children
people strive to teach them well;
must be done with love

© D R Harris - 13 March 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 13 04, 03:09


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The Good Ol' Days

Shopping for our needs
brings back fond mem'rys;
remember pennies?

© D R Harris - 12 March 2004
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 11 04, 02:00


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Right now
I'm so happy,
wedding day approaches,
nervous, but mostly excited,
soon ... love

© D R Harris - 10 March 2004
(9 days to "Reinhart")
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 3 04, 05:07


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Very unusual and interesting poem, Dove, so full of yummy things to eat, smell, and look upon! I did wonder about a couple of words, though.  

QUOTE(Dove @ Mar. 02 2004, 21:39)
Sunset

Spoonfuls of sugar
cover blueberries,
with a banana on the side.  

Why banana on the side ... why not in bowl with blueberries?

Many
mandarin slices,
strawberry splotches,  

Why strawberry "splotches"?  I LOVE strawberries, but the splotches I cut out first.  

cherry stems,  
Cherry "stems" not the sweet fruit?

kiwi leaves,  
Hmmmmm kiwi "leaves" ... never tasted the leaves, but LOVE kiwi FRUIT.

plum halves,
and the last
sliver of peach;
ripe pear-shaped day.

Pomegranate seeds,
grape wine perfume,
cranberry strings,  

Do you mean strings like for a Christmas tree?

pealed coconut orbiting;  

Don't get this one at all.

eggplant night.
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Otherwise, I think it's a clever poem full of visual goodies!

Blessings,

Dolly   butterfly.gif
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:31


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EXQUISITELY contructed and achieved, Snow!!  I've read through it three times and will return for more.  Not only is the poem so well crafted, but the subject matter and your address of it is outstandingly creative!  I truly want to write like this some day!  

This poem is so finished ... so polished ... perfect!  No nits from me.    :dance:

Blessings,

Dolly  :pharoah:
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:21


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Ohhhhh Amy!  After too many deaths in my life I lived through so many night hauntings as this marvelously expressive poem portrays.  Those nights are no longer a part of my world, but I survived through many, many dastardly difficult loooonnnnnnnnnggg ones, steadfastly willing the dawn to find me.  And, they did ... each dawn whisper-kissed from God found me and bathed me with hope.

Wonderful poem, girl!

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:12


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QUOTE(Zeus² @ Feb. 26 2004, 13:54)
Dolly,
shows what keeping the faith can do, and you expressed it well.
Larry

Yes, Larry, "keeping the faith" can do this and much, MUCH more!!  Thanks for your comments and encouragement.

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:10


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QUOTE(codger @ Feb. 24 2004, 07:00)
Words of wisdom here for sure--
Nice one sun.gif  wave.gif

Gerry.

Thank you, Gerry.  My somewhat elusive muse wrote this one in response to the words of a dear friend.

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:08


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QUOTE(codger @ Feb. 21 2004, 13:46)
Dolly, nice one--
Know what you mean sun.gif  sings.gif

Gerry.

Thank you, Gerry.  It's nice to be understood and reach empathetic hearts.

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:06


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QUOTE(Zeus² @ Feb. 26 2004, 13:59)
Dolly,
so much said poignantly with so few words.
Larry

Ahhhhhh yes, my friend ... a lesson I'm learning more about every day.  I've noticed the last lingering taste of my foot-in-my-mouth is leaving.  When one's mouth is moving it's hard to engage ears or muse.

Thank you, larry,

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 05:03


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QUOTE(Siren @ Feb. 26 2004, 07:00)
Dolly,

So much said with few words.

Enjoyed

Dani

Hi Dani ... it takes time and doing to improve one's skills.  Daniel's been telling me this for years and I think I'm just beginning to find my muse.

Thank you for your kindness in stopping and commenting,

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Mar 1 04, 04:57


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Very nice, John, very sensitively sculpted and presented.  No nits from me.  

Blessings,

Dolly   Pharoah.gif
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Athena
Posted on: Feb 26 04, 00:29


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Hey Lori!  MELIKESTOO!  Thanks for letting me know something needed changing!

Hugs,

Dolly
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Athena
Posted on: Feb 25 04, 19:05


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QUOTE(blondie @ Feb. 24 2004, 08:35)
Hi there, Dolly!  wave.gif

I enjoyed your cinquain. :)  I have noticed you seem to have a knack for these, which I admire.  I am fond of the form, but I have trouble compacting a solid message into so few lines.  You do it quite well! :)

I can relate to this piece.....I guess it's the risk-taking "Aries" in me...

Take care and happy writing!

~Amy~

Hi Amy,

Glad you liked this wee poem.  I had the same problem in the beginning, with feeling the need of too many words.  I'm still working on it, but the way I began was reading Daniel's fine cinqs and then writing a poem about some subject, using as few words as possible.  Then, I began eliminating words in order to fit the poem's syllable count ... lo and behold, I found I didn't really NEED all the words I'd thought I did.

Thanks for your compliments and good luck in writing one of your own!  When you do, let me know as I want to read it, OK?

Blessings,

Dolly
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