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jerryk
Posted on: Nov 22 15, 10:28


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QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Nov 20 15, 23:51 ) *
Since I've not posted here for a while, I thought I might get some new perspective from y'all on a piece I wrote here a couple years ago but never put it up for critique:



Jacob's Son



Gold-

wonder

kill-shot me

a world away;

I can hear the wind

thru the keyhole, as of

the last policeman's whistle.

Why did I forsake my homestead

for but the prospect of shine shine shine?

I'm charred and scruffed like the fallen angel.

Who'd ever find a land more kind than home?

But the shadow of night spills darkness;

I've become but shadow and bone.

The song of Achilles warns

about the long walk back.

Though Dad bid me go

Mom will be there

defending

Jacob's

son.




© MLee Dickens'son 2013



from 15 challenge book titles, in order: Gold, Wonder, Kill Shot, A World Away, The Wind Through the Keyhole, The Last Policeman, Shine Shine Shine, Charred & Scruffed, The Fallen Angel, A Land More Kind Than Home, Shadow of Night, Shadow and Bone, The Song of Achilles, The Long Walk, Defending Jacob


Hi Daniel;
an interesting format based on book titles. Though your lines flow well and continue to grow on this reader, I still find myself unsure of their collective meaning; after all, we are dealing with fragments. Admittedly, I'm too unversed in the interpretation of enigmatic poetry; therefore, most likely, I have no business commenting on this poem. Still, I can appreciate your effort and am curious to see how those more knowledgeable readers will read your work. Most likely, I'll sit here with egg on my face, lol. Meanwhile, I’m glad I read your work; it gave me something to think about. Take care, my friend. mickeymouse.gif
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Posted on: Nov 22 15, 08:14


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QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Nov 21 15, 17:01 ) *
Hey, Jerry...

Just another vote for the shorter title that was suggested "Working Out with Gloria" -- NOT identifying her as your fitness guru. It leaves much more to the imagination, methinks!

... and I hope you'll drop in on my piece that I posted earlier today. I've not been around up here for some time, and I'm glad to be making a "comeback" of sorts. I look forward to further interacting with you.

deLightingly, Daniel sun.gif


Thanks again, Daniel;
glad the title change works for you. Just commented on your poem, giving it my best shot, lol. Take care,
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Posted on: Nov 21 15, 18:29


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In summer I oft get cranky,
feel not up to hanky-panky;
I lie on my couch
and act like a slouch,
just like a lazy-boned Yankee
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Posted on: Nov 21 15, 17:48


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QUOTE (Merlin @ Nov 21 15, 11:10 ) *
Greetings Jerry K,
saw your name so had to pop in to say Hullo!
Yep, time or two I'll look to see what's happening, but don't expect me to critique. That said, how about dropping the klee-shay and using an original like "chew on your sock"?

Good to see you again. Wondered after PC closed down due to lack of participation.

Like JD mentioned, I limerick a bit.

Merlin


Hi there, Merlin;
sorry we lost touch, but I'm glad you stopped by to say hello. Thanks for the suggestion; I like that "chew on your sock," lol. So, PC is totally gone? I lost track of it. Take care, and I'll participate here a bit more often. Maybe even come up with a limerick . . . . Thanks,
Jerry
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Posted on: Nov 21 15, 07:51


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QUOTE (JustDaniel @ Nov 20 15, 23:28 ) *
Hey, Jerry, this is my kind o' sonnet!! Love it!

I think Luce is right about the title as well, so glad that you seem to agree. By the way, the new suggested title might also be considered a new suggestive title --which also might be a plus. Think about it.

I think I agree with your choice of "put in a sock" because it lightly alludes rather obviously to the 'correct' expression... and by the way, what makes an expression like that 'correct' anyhow! LOL

Of course no one here wants you to end up 'with your foot in your mouth', so you should check out your line 9 (aside from the typo mentioned), because it has an extra foot!

Something akin to "her torture starting out at 9 o'clock" might work?

Great to read you, my friend. Looking forward to more.

deLightingly, Daniel sun.gif

P.S. In light of the tenor of this sonnet, I think you might really enjoy checking out Karnak's Crossing further down the board here. Come drop in and play with me and Larry ... and Merlin also, who joins us there with Limericks of late! I hope we'll see you in one of our daily interchanges in the forms!



Hi Daniel;
it's great to see you; I'll be danged, this is the second reply to you, having lost the first one. Strange--for I thought I knew my way around on this site. Then, to top it all, while I posted a revision of my sonnet, I lost my original text. However, all your points have been noted. I'm glad you like my write and I'll see you on the ''other side," the Karnak's Crossing.
Take care, my friend,
Jerry
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 19:02


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QUOTE (Luce @ Nov 17 15, 14:51 ) *
I was saving this for Christmas - but oh what the heck. Pre-Thanksgiving is close
enough. Besides, the rhyming board seems a little bare.

Hi there, Luce;
I can't comment on the rhyming scheme and meter; I'm a bit rusty when it comes to either, but I will say that yours is a clever anecdotal account that reminds me of "Christmas Vacation" with Chevy Chase. In my opinion, no ball games should be televised on Christmas Day, lol.
Happy to hear that no animals were harmed, lol. I'm a cats and dogs owner who just returned from the doggy park. I picked up various scents that now confuse my cats. Take care, minniemouse.gif
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 18:34


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QUOTE (Luce @ Nov 17 15, 14:20 ) *
Very cute Jerry. Very light.

BUT - Lord help me - I got to point out three things.

1. How about a shorter title"

"Working out with Gloria" instead of this long one.

2. Typo - 9 o'clock instead of 9'oclock

3. The expression is "put a sock in it" so saying "put in a sock" doesn't work really.

Writing a sonnet is not easy. But, this is a great start.

Luce


Hi Luce;
thanks for reading and commenting; yep, I can shorten the title. Thanks for catching the typo in "nine o'clock." Also, I used the reversed phrase "put in a sock" to rhyme with "clock." Admittedly, it's a bit lame, but I'd gotten too lazy to rewrite those two lines because of the sonnet's light tone. I appreciate your wonderful comment. Regards, pinkpanther.gif
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 11:30


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Hi Richard;
I definitely remember you and your always interesting poems and comments from the other, now defunct site. Glad we meet again. Enjoyed your interesting poem, but it strikes me more as a free-verse. Even though you made good use of end rhymes, it isn't quite a formal poem, but rather a story in rhyme without emphasis on strict meter? There is some good stuff in your write. Good to see you, mickeymouse.gif
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 11:10


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Edited Version (Sorry, I lost my original while editing, but several valid points had been raised)

M Fitness Mentor Gloria

Today a sonnet I set out to write;
My goal? Oh--just to exercise the mind,
And therefore, nothing clever, something light;
So, don’t expect to read the serious kind.

Let’s talk about my Gloria a bit:
Oh, she is tall and blond, with eyes as blue
As Norway’s Fjords; although she’s strong and fit,
Her Irish mother’s humor still shines through.

Her torture, starting out at 9 o’clock,
Brings back to life my fractured vertebrae.
Then, when I whine, she says: put in a sock!
She made a pretzel out of me today,

Yet, bless her heart, she doesn’t charge a dime—
I hope, she tortures me--for a long time.
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 08:05


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QUOTE (Psyche @ Nov 7 14, 12:35 ) *
So glad you just needed more medication, Jerry. Hope you continue to write your great poetry for many years to come!

Cheers, Syl***


Hello there, Sylvia;
I just want to acknowledge your note dated Nov 7 14. Sorry, it's a little late, but better late than never, lol. Well, Parkinson's actually doesn't kill; it's the side effects it invites that might weaken the body-- So far, so good; the last checkup caused my doctor to say that I have the heart of a 26 year old, lol. So, as an organ donor I will bequeath my heart to some lucky youngster in need of a fine heart-- I had my 81st birthday back in October and feel fit enough to celebrate several more. I hope you are well; thanks for your last update, and I wish you my very best, :)
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 07:27


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QUOTE (Psyche @ Nov 6 15, 00:41 ) *
Hi Jerry! So glad you visited and left this lovely, nostalgic poem for our enjoyment.
I like the way you've arranged the lines, with some repetitions that give it power to offset any sentimentalism.

I think this poem could be re-arranged for R&R. I'm not much good at rhyming, but I sense that you could fairly easily transform it. Just sayin'...

Cheers. Do come back with some treasure from your part of Hippocrene. The Muses and MM will appreciate that butterfly.gif
Syl***


Hi Syl,
good to see you. I haven't visited this site in a long time, but I'm glad to see that the demise of one forum brought life into this one. Delighted you like this particular poem, and you are right: it would, perhaps, read quite well in rhyme form. I hope you are well, Syl? I had my 81st birthday in Oct., and feel energized. lol. Thanks for the nice comment, charliebrown.gif
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Posted on: Nov 17 15, 07:12


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QUOTE (RC James @ Nov 3 15, 09:32 ) *
Jerry - This is nostalgc withoiut beingsentimental, which is not an easy thing to capture. Well done, RC


Hello, RC;
thanks for the comment. I haven't visited this site in a while, but I'm glad to see all you talented people from the expired forum here. You might remember me as "Beanstalk." Appreciate the comment,
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Posted on: Apr 5 15, 08:22


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QUOTE (Psyche @ Apr 2 15, 23:46 ) *

Hi Jerry!

I've had a good laugh with your Don Juan fantasy, expressed in simple rhyme and rhythm.

Very effective and with a trickster's twist at the end...LOL...

You can't remove it from MM now, because all your fans will be very angry! Do tell us how it has fared in other forums.

Great to see you posting, hope to follow suit presently, cheer.gif

Cheers,
Syl*** butterfly.gif


Hi there, Syl;
how nice to see ya again! How the heck have ya been? I check in about once every couple day--just to see what's happening on this site. I'm glad you got something out of my write. To answer your question--yes, I'd posted it on another site (TPS) where this write (and others) drew some nice comments that now encouraged me to self-publish all my poems and prose. At my age (80) it's time to collect my writings and present them to family and friends. All's well here at my end and I hope you are doing okay? Thanks for commenting, and I hope to see you again, soon. Be well, grinning.gif
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Posted on: Mar 9 15, 07:37


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QUOTE (Eisa @ Mar 7 15, 17:25 ) *
Hi Jerry,

I enjoyed your sense of humour here, which made me smile. It really seems already finished to me, but if you decide to make any changes I'll look forward to reading again.

Snow Snowflake.gif


Hi there, Snow;
thanks for looking into my write. I must have been in a silly mood when I wrote this account of the Don. Down the road I may tinker with these verses, but at the moment they are no longer on my priority list. Now I look at this poem as an amusing sketch--but nothing of lasting value. Thanks for reading and commenting. charliebrown.gif
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Posted on: Mar 6 15, 17:02


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QUOTE (Rhymer @ Mar 6 15, 05:04 ) *
I for one enjoyed your rhyming tale so far Jerry, and trust you'll finish it?
Although I do believe you've given away the punch line already!
I too am guilty of writing some of my own poems in a like manner: keeping the reader engrossed and entirely going
down the wrong road, until that all important disclosure at the end!
Nice to read lines that have a rhythm and decent rhyming pattern. Simple but effective.
Well that's my thoughts for what they're worth. Some may not agree but that's will be their problem! Keep going!
Ciao Rhymer.



Hi there, Rhymer;
thanks for the visit; well, not too many readers will have a problem with your assessment because it is very quiet here. I haven't yet decided what to do with this particular write because it is a quirky notion that I pursued, something that had it's origin in a find as I perused my attic space. Let's say, this poem is a narrative, and something that I might yet revise--or simply set aside. As you know, not everything is worthy of preservation, lol, but to be fair to myself, I'll post it on another forum and see what the reaction might be. Meanwhile, thanks for reading and commenting. It's good to see you, IndianChief.gif
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Posted on: Mar 4 15, 11:11


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(Kind reader; this impromptu poem is meant to be humorous. Although not yet complete, at this point I would like to know if it has any merits or should be abandoned. My wife laughs at it--which can be good--or bad.)

My Don Juan Fantasy

Signora Inez made this cloak
for her son, the great seducer:
Don Juan. The garment served
that rascal well; for its producer,

his mother, stitched on magic braids
that no fair lady could resist;
some hundreds in Italia, Francia,
Germania were on his list.

Fine conquests all; in Hispania
alone--this mantle worked so well,
he tallied one thousand and three
old matrons, plus the comely belle.

His sword's keen point came in quite handy
in driving off an objecting mate
or seriously enraged suitors
(who arrived quite mad, but always late).

But now, his cloak--his sword are mine--
its well-shaped grip, the blade elastic,
that glistening guard in silvery sheen--
all entirely made of plastic--

and not the famous Toledo steel.
“On guard,” I say, “advance; retreat;
deux appels . . . attack!” And now he flees--
“Do you, sir knave, concede defeat?”

What woman would refuse the man
who’d fought so well to conquer her?
I pause to stroke my wavy hair
(what’s left), but then I hear a stir:

“Take off that silly, silly cape,”
my own fair lady behind me spoke,
and I remove the seventeenth
century Mardi Gras-ball cloak

long overdue at Sid Luigi’s
Costume Shop, since 30 years ago;
I place it in the trunk filled with
some props I'll save for my next show.
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Posted on: Mar 4 15, 07:50


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QUOTE (Eisa @ Feb 24 15, 15:39 ) *
She will Return with her Flaming Torch

Swamped by a cumbersome
duvet, I attempt to wrestle it off
excessively snoozing.

Shadows dance by the window
like demons taunting my panic
of being snared in twilight ... forever.

Struggling to rise, I scrutinise
the sky for willow warblers returning
from palms in toasted lands,

but it's premature, for their circadian
stirring. I drag drapes back further.
Naked arms wave frantically

pleading to be buttoned with buds,
succoured by mother orb.
I slump into hopeless pillows, waiting

for Persephone's return.


Hi there, Eisa;
yours is a fine write that touches on the depression brought on by a long winter, which is something I can't complain about in this valley of perpetual warmth and sunshine. The condition you lament is called "Seasonal Affective Disorder." Such depression and despair at our endless, hot summers actually hit us in May and last into October; of course, we have no snow to shovel, lol, but the A/C sings its dirge for many months, and therefore I can relate to "SAD." No wrapping up in comforters! No ma'm, when the A/C unit fails, one strips down to the undies.
Actually, your poem is pretty much straight forward and well composed. Since the goddess Persephone is thought of as the torch-bearing harbinger or spring, your poem's title makes sense. Good to see your poem; no nits. Thanks for posting,
Jerry
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Posted on: Feb 26 15, 19:02


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Hello JLY,
I also like this write dedicated to your spouse. Good word choices and rhymes make this poem a good one to remember, and I'm sure your spouse cherishes it. Sorry to hear about your cold weather; here in this part of Arizona it is citrus blossom time. Nice sunny days.
Beautiful poem! No nits at all. Nice meeting you, :
Jerry
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Posted on: Feb 26 15, 18:46


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QUOTE (Eisa @ Feb 24 15, 15:32 ) *
Hi Jerry,

I'm very late replying here - I've been absent for too long.

I enjoyed your poem, written in your engaging style. I find nothing to nit at all. I hope I haven't returned too late for you to read my reply.

Snow Snowflake.gif


Hi Snow,
well, better late than never, lol! Glad to see your comment, for I thought for sure this site was closing down. About once a week I return to see what's going on, and surprise, surprise, there you are. Now that I see signs of life on this site, I shall once again post some of my poetry and offer a comment or two. Thank you for reading my previous, and I shall return. Best to you, woodstock.gif
Jerry

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Posted on: Nov 8 14, 08:34


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Hi Sylvia, my most dear fan :)
yeah, the silence on this forum is deafening, but what can we do but try to instill the occasional breath of life in this site. You can't imagine how oft I toyed with the notion to remove it from my computer . . . but there's still something I like about being here.
Well, Halloween's come and gone, and I stored my vampire fangs in safekeeping for another year; but rest assured, next Halloween you will be the first to receive the "bite," even if the long flight in form of a bat kills me--again, lol. Thank you for reading and attaching all those appropriate comments. It's interesting how our minds retain figures of speech like that tolling of the bell; never thought of it as I used it. And, indeed, there are no atheist's in the foxholes or trenches. Now, whenever I experienced danger and fear, way back in the 60's, I would take comfort in a picture of Jacky Kennedy. rolleyes.gif Sylvia, as always, it's been a pleasure talking with you. :) I hope all's well with you and your husband. My best to you,
Jerry
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Posted on: Nov 7 14, 18:19


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QUOTE (Psyche @ Nov 7 14, 13:36 ) *

Hi Jerry,

Love this one...a sexy vampire, not like the one you posted in FV! thumbsup.gif

And it makes one think... The last stanza is wonderful. Makes one feel...Well, why not? blush21.gif

You've managed to make the whole piece sound so real. The vampire's desire is remarkably gentle, as the title says. It all comes thru' to this reader as sincere love!

So it's original, too. Doesn't sound so tragic or fearsome. I never see vampire movies anymore. The first one or two were enough for me, ages ago! shocked.gif

I'll only comment that you have the word "seep" in S1 as well as S2. Never mind, just me.

Thanks for sharing this, and I'm so glad you continue to write such marvellous poems, as well as paint. cloud9.gif
Cheers, Syl***




Thank you Sylvia;
"I am--Dracula," lol. Too bad you can't hear me sound out that line in a Hungarian goulash-over-noodles voice like Bela Lugosi's, one of the first Dracula movie actors here in the USA. Now, Syl, you just better look out: when I don my black cape and pull it up to eyes and then wiggle my eyebrows, like Groucho Marx, I'm simply irresistible. :)

I removed "seeps" and substituted 'creeps.' So, now I'm ready to scare folks next Halloween. Yes, Halloween has become a big deal here in the States, and I like it almost as much as our pagan Christmas with that obscene jingling of the cash register.

I think the first time I read Dracula was at the age of 12 or 13. After seeing Christopher Lee in The Blood of Dracula, I recall having had nightmares.
Sylvia, thanks for reading my stuff; you are a faithful poetry friend, and I'm glad you enjoyed my Vampire poem. I do hope all is well with you and your husband? Take care, dear Sylvia.
See you soon (without fangs). ghostface.gif
Jerry
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Posted on: Nov 6 14, 07:02


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QUOTE (Larry @ Nov 5 14, 21:12 ) *
Hi Jerry,

Sorry you lost the original. Next time, just go into "edit" on the original and start the revision above the first
post, then note it as a revision and also note the original version as well.

One other small nit on the revision:

S3/L1 - one foot too long; get rid of "scented". L2 points the reader to the scent of roses.

Good job!

Larry



Thanks for your time, Larry. The "scented" is gone and I guess this write is done--for what it is worth. See you next Halloween or before then. charliebrown.gif Jerry
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Posted on: Nov 4 14, 08:03


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Revised version.
Thanks Larry. I just lost the original, but I appreciate your help. :) Jerry


The Gentle Vampire Cometh

Late evening comes with its nocturnal chill;
mist seeps beneath your door with bolts and lock.
I do not enter with malignant will;
you open up before I softly knock.

I come as friend and lover; you’ll adore
the rush of my desire. Primeval urges seep,
then crash like waves upon an island’s shore.
Are you alone? Your mother is asleep?

Don’t be afraid; I now inhale your scented breath--
so sweet as though you were a rose in prime;
your throat invites my bite; the kiss of death
that offers life beyond your own short time.

I listen to the turmoil in your breast
and sense your need for more than mortal love;
enraptured you will ride upon love’s crest.
Now come; but be forewarned, yet spotless dove,

held in my arms you’ll sleep in our cold tomb,
not quite in Heaven, yet—not quite in Hell--
for with our love must come such taste of doom.
Already nears the day; my love, sleep well.


QUOTE (Larry @ Nov 3 14, 22:21 ) *
Okay Jerry,

Sorry it took so long to get back to this but the past weekend is one of our busiest of the year with our crafts.

As far as critique, let me make a few suggestions which are, of course, the "take or toss" variety:

S1/L2 - "mist weaves around..." sounds like the door is already open. Perhaps: "mist seeps under..."

S2/L1 & L3 - end rhymes don't work very well ( relieve / reef ) although they are "near rhymes". Can you change the wording
to ... "you'll adore" and "island's shore"?

S3/L1 - you might try to exchange the end of this line from "red" which doesn't rhyme at all and is repeated quickly on L2 with "... passion's breath".

S3/L3 - "throats" should be singular "throat"

S5/L2 - If you are going to capitalize "Heaven" then one must assume you should also capitalize "Hell".

I know the crits seem to be picky but there's my two cents for what it's worth.

Larry



Larry,
thank you for the suggested changes. I'm glad you came through with those helpful suggestions. I wrote that poem in a hurry to get it ready for Halloween, without much caring one way or the other, but I think it has some potentials for my collection of spooky poems. I'll make some changes and then re-post it within a day or two. Meantime, thank you for your editorial assistance.
Much appreciated, :)
Jerry
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Hi Larry,
yes indeed, any suggestions will be welcome. I wrote this vampire poem quite spontaneously and as a fun piece: heaven knows, there's always a a slip up that warrants an editor's keen eye. In fact, I would appreciate it. Thank you, Larry. Take care,
Jerry
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This is so sad, lol. Indeed, Larry--I goofed. I have been working on an oil painting, giving my post less thought than might have behooved me. My apologies to you and others who may have wondered what this old fool was doing. Duh~ Best to yu,
Jerry
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