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 Apr 3 09, 07:21
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 Babylonian  Posts: 64 Joined: 2-April 09 From: Beautiful Brooklyn NY Member No.: 773 Real Name: Michael Pollack Writer of: Poetry  |
again the circle's drawing near to full
frail shrunken withered being lying there within herself first felt the fetal pull as one we were till birthed in light and air and now my turn to feed the one who fed and now my turn to lift who first held me and now my turn to lead the one's who led as spiral time and life as needs-must be Michael in Brooklyn ·······  ·······anything which does not kill me makes me stronger
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Apr 4 09, 08:43
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Hello Michael in Brooklyn,
 What a fascinating poem!  In yourfirst stanza, I enjoy how you describe life coming full circle. The description of mother feeling that first pull and the unity/bond of mother and infant is spectacular. In S2, I can almost taste the responsibility in your words of now the narrator becoming the 'parent' and the change of hands. Well done! Enjoyed the read. ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Apr 4 09, 12:03
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Babylonian Posts: 64 Joined: 2-April 09 From: Beautiful Brooklyn NY Member No.: 773 Real Name: Michael Pollack Writer of: Poetry |
Thanks Clio for the read and the response - much appreciated.
As we age and take on roles of parents to our parents life seems quite different and requires much adjustment. ······· ·······anything which does not kill me makes me stronger
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Apr 4 09, 12:40
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Mike, an interesting perspective of the cycle of life, I guess I was lucky in never that sort of duties with my parents. Although I now see it in my own children in their care for me.
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Apr 4 09, 16:11
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Mike
This is a very moving read for me, bringing back memories of my own mother, who had Alzheimer's. It does indeed take some adjusting to being 'parent to the parent'. It's part of my life that I still struggle to come to terms with even though my mother passed away 3 years ago. You have expressed your emotions very well and I look forward to reading more of your work. Thanks for sharing Snow 
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Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner    |
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Apr 4 09, 17:02
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Babylonian Posts: 64 Joined: 2-April 09 From: Beautiful Brooklyn NY Member No.: 773 Real Name: Michael Pollack Writer of: Poetry |
So nice to meet you Steve and Eira - and thanks much
for reading and commenting. When my mother had a heart attack and was unable to care for my multi-farc dementia affected father I went to Florida (where else) and lived and cared for my father for 6 months - the hardest and yet most meaningful experience of my life. Hope to be reading and commenting on your works too. ······· ·······anything which does not kill me makes me stronger
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Apr 4 09, 17:48
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 Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 1,250 Joined: 2-August 03 From: USA Member No.: 7 Writer of: Poetry |
Hello Mike,
Such a deeply passionate poem with so much emotion! Your words ring true as we reverse roles in life, especially as our dear parents age. I believe, as hard as it may be, that is what a good daughter or son does! Very touching and genuine. Thank you for sharing. Lindi ······· ·······"Imagination is more important than knowledge and encircles the world"
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Apr 6 09, 08:50
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Babylonian Posts: 64 Joined: 2-April 09 From: Beautiful Brooklyn NY Member No.: 773 Real Name: Michael Pollack Writer of: Poetry |
Thanks much Lindi for reading and commenting and hope you took something
meaningful from the reading. ······· ·······anything which does not kill me makes me stronger
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