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Athena
post Feb 8 04, 01:21
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A rictameter is short form of poetry, which uses nine lines. The 1st and last lines are the same. The lines are developed by syllable count, which is as follows:


line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables
line 6 - 8 syllables
line 7 - 6 syllables
line 8 - 4 syllables
line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1

They can be lots of fun when you challenge yourself to use meter and a rhyme scheme, although the poetry form does not insist on either. Have fun!

EXAMPLE:


A Son To His Father

Father
console me now:
Though I stand here a man,
I am but a boy lost beneath
a soldier’s attire...still mourning a loss
I learned to grieve in younger days,
when you were strong and I
was not yet a
father.

EJD





Good Advice

In morn
when  I awoke
I clearly understood
what had been confusing last night.
I had been so ready to disagree ...
Perhaps the docs are all correct
when saying we must sleep
to awake refreshed
in morn?

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©  D R Harris - 7 February 2004



Now it's your turn to try one.  C'mon .. they're fun!    cheer.gif

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post Feb 8 04, 06:50
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Yes, Dolly, they can be fun...

A muse
will stir ewe up;
it’s faun’d of satyrs too.
Can’t see the forest for the trees?
Well, don’t give up! Acorn is all I knead
to fill or sophic’ly reflect
upon a subject here
attempting to
amuse.


© Daniel J Ricketts 07 Nov 2003

or descriptive...

A rose
slowly opens
delicate fragrances
while petals beautifully unfold,
exposing stemmed sweethearts in ornate urns
yet freely mingling baby's breath
with mature greenery
once fresh waters
arose.


© Daniel J Ricketts 06 April 2003

or dreamily romantic...

Adrift, I Stare Awake

Adrift
I find you here
beside me where you were
when we'd begun to slowly move
our lips, then more, so liquidly until
most quietly you'd slipped upon
me, undulating there
to find my gaze
adrift.

I stare
at ebon eyes
then on inside of you
to find that sweet serenity
I've come to cherish so in fleeting words
we too infrequently have shared
while yearning yet for more,
so here in mist
I stare.

Awake
again with you
amazed how much you love
in ways I'd never dared to dream,
with such capacity and radiant warmth,
a hearth, security and peace
a living, breathing joy
each day when I
awake.


© M Lee Dickens' son 29 April 2003

even haiku-like reflective...

blossom
faded though fair
yet withered of a hope
only yesterday emblazoned
on opulently hued petals, fiery sweet
scents permeating a warm breeze
now stale, acrid, hanging
from a tear-streaked
blossom


© Daniel J Ricketts 22 May 2003

and much more...

but yes, they are fun to write, and they can spawn creativity.  Soooooo... write on!

lovin' deLight, Daniel  sun.gif

P.S.  What a wonderful first rictameter yours is!  Keep it up, Ms Athena!


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post Feb 8 04, 10:29
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Adorning Dawn

Sunrise
wakens creatures
to her sparkling splendors,
casting chaotic stimuli
feeding firmaments of glitter and glee
on cushioned clouds. Dreams dwindle, sleep
struggles unrelenting.
Subservient
sunrise.

© 2004 Lorraine M Kanter


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Hi Daniel!!

Heyyy Daniel, no one will ever call YOU stingy!!  Six Rictameters!!!  And all good ... sheeeesssshhh ... and here I think it's a big deal to even write one!!
Most of these are very thought provoking, too, but all are superb!!  Thank you!!

Hi Lori,

That's a wonderful Rictameter!  Hmmmm wonder why I'm the only one to recently "discover" them?  Thank you, Lori, you seem to do everything well that you set your hand to.  Thank you!

Hi Alan,

Thanks for making a monkey of me, my friend!   Speechless.gif I really don't remember that other thread.  I'll get busy and move them all in together, methinks.  Thanks for pointing it out to me ... you're so sweet...

Always trying to learn,
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A rictameter is short form of poetry, which uses nine lines. The 1st and last lines are the same. The lines are developed by syllable count, which is as follows:


line 1 - 2 syllables - same as line 9
line 2 - 4 syllables
line 3 - 6 syllables
line 4 - 8 syllables
line 5 - 10 syllables
line 6 - 8 syllables
line 7 - 6 syllables
line 8 - 4 syllables
line 9 - 2 syllables - same as line 1

They can be lots of fun when you challenge yourself to use meter and a rhyme scheme, although the poetry form does not insist on either. Have fun!

EXAMPLE:

A Son To His Father

Father
console me now:
Though I stand here a man,
I am but a boy lost beneath
a soldier’s attire...still mourning a loss
I learned to grieve in younger days,
when you were strong and I
was not yet a
father.

EJD


HI Liz - just centering this one for ya!
Cleoi


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OOhhhh Thanks Liz!

Here's one of mine (remember this one?):

Adorning Dawn

Sunrise
wakens creatures
to her sparkling splendors,
casting chaotic stimuli
to feed firmaments of glitter and glee
on cushioned clouds. Dreams dwindle, sleep
struggles subservient.
Unrelenting
sunrise.

© Lorraine M Kanter 17 April 2003


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QUOTE
Here's a new one:


Do you
remember me?
...My blushing cheeks aglow,
the whisper of your soft hello
would kindle my darkest lustful longings
then you'd fly away, come morning.
I miss you once again
so I pretend ~
do you?


Very lovely Liz!

A great example with an aliterative flair!  :love:  blush.gif

Awesome!
Lori


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Nothing Compares

Her heart
at times, is weak.
Compelled by love...she'll seek,
all greater gifts by far, would fail
to please her more than he. As others pale;
when she compares his poetry.
With words, like art, he paints
the canvas of...
her heart.



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QUOTE (AMETHYST @ Aug. 12 2003, 23:54)

Nothing Compares

Her heart
at times, is weak.
Compelled by love...she'll seek,
all greater gifts by far, would fail
to please her more than he. As others pale;
when she compares his poetry.
With words, like art, he paints
the canvas of...
her heart.


Absolutely lovely!!!! Tigger.gif sun.gif :tophat:

Cheers!

:love:

We love adding tiles like this pretty one!  :angel:

Thankies!
Luvs!

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Chartered Footpaths

Walking
on earthen floor
coursing chartered footpaths,
I veer off track to a place where
heavy burdens relinquish with each step.
Nature's spirited song breathes birth
and harmonizes paths
pioneered by
walking.


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That night,
the moon lit sky
in crimson red--had bled
pear shaped tears for her broken heart,
to wash away her pain and mend her faith.
The moon; sole witness of her blush
when she had fell in love
and he slayed her,
that night



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Ego
got in his way;
appeared to be the best
at almost everything he tried,
yet always wanted everyone to know.
But who knows, since he disappeared?
Balloon one day ka-boomed!
No queries, Where’d
‘e go?


© Daniel J Ricketts 12 Sept 2003


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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 12 2003, 08:46)
Ego
got in his way;
appeared to be the best
at almost everything he tried,
yet always wanted everyone to know.
But who knows, since he disappeared?
Balloon one day ka-boomed!
No queries, Where’d
‘e go?


© Daniel J Ricketts 12 Sept 2003

Where is that masked man?  :wall:

Ahhh -so GOOD to see you posting at Mosaic! Please, more more!  :wizard:  :dance:

Cheers!
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QUOTE (AMETHYST @ Sep. 09 2003, 09:27)
That night,
the moon lit sky
in crimson red--had bled
pear shaped tears for her broken heart,
to wash away her pain and mend her faith.
The moon; sole witness of her blush
when she had fell in love
and he slayed her,
that night


Ahhhhh Amethyst!  :lovie:

VERY surreal! I love it! You know me, I like (tasteful) controversy!

Well done! Guitar.gif

~Cleo  :pharoah:


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post Sep 12 03, 21:08
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Well, you asked for it, LorII!

Here's one I've not posted anywhere:

Adrift, I Stare Awake

Adrift
I find you here
beside me where you were
when we'd begun to slowly move
our lips, then more, so liquidly until
most quietly you'd slipped upon
me, undulating there
to find my gaze
adrift.

I stare
at ebon eyes
but on inside of you
to find that sweet serenity
I've come to cherish so in fleeting words
we too infrequently have shared
while yearning yet for more,
so here in mist
I stare.

Awake
again with you
amazed how much you love
in ways I'd never dared to dream,
with such capacity and glowing warmth,
a hearth, security and peace
a living, breathing joy
each day when I
awake.

© M Lee Dickens' son 29 April 2003


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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 12 2003, 22:08)
Well, you asked for it, LorII!

Here's one I've not posted anywhere:

Adrift, I Stare Awake

Adrift
I find you here
beside me where you were
when we'd begun to slowly move
our lips, then more, so liquidly until
most quietly you'd slipped upon
me, undulating there
to find my gaze
adrift.

I stare
at ebon eyes
but on inside of you
to find that sweet serenity
I've come to cherish so in fleeting words
we too infrequently have shared
while yearning yet for more,
so here in mist
I stare.

Awake
again with you
amazed how much you love
in ways I'd never dared to dream,
with such capacity and glowing warmth,
a hearth, security and peace
a living, breathing joy
each day when I
awake.

© M Lee Dickens' son 29 April 2003

WOW Daniel!

I didn;t know you had sensuality within you to share?!  :huh:  :dance:

Nicely done!
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Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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post Sep 15 03, 09:33
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QUOTE (Cleo_Serapis @ Sep. 13 2003, 06:29)
WOW Daniel!

I didn;t know you had sensuality within you to share?!  huh.gif  dance.gif

Nicely done!
~Cleo  Pharoah.gif

Hmmmm

So you must think Eileen is totally bored, huh?   ???

on Critiquing

Come back
to simply say
that you just don’t concur
or that you’d rather let it stay
as a fleeting moment’s inspiration
now memorialized in words
so sacred that your gut
bellows some crude
comeback.


© Daniel J Ricketts 15 Sept 2003
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QUOTE (Just Daniel @ Sep. 15 2003, 09:33)
ORIGINAL
on Critiquing

Come back
to simply say
that you just don’t concur
or that you’d rather let it stay
as a fleeting moment’s inspiration
now memorialized in words
so sacred that your gut
bellows some crude
comeback.


© Daniel J Ricketts 15 Sept 2003

Here's a complete REVISION of the previous post:

Conscentsual Critiquing

Come back
to simply share
how you cannot concur
or that you’d rather let it lie
a fleeting moment’s inspiration gone
somehow memorialized in words
ineffable – your bowels
let out a crude
comeback.


© Daniel J Ricketts 11 Oct 2003


Note:

If  concentual = possessing harmony, accordant

and  consensual = (agreement) existing by consent

then must not conscentsual = ascent toward harmony existing with a distinct air about it ?


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<font color='#000000'>And another example of rictameter, since several have been asking about the form:

Back to My Roots

What's wrong?
Would you believe
that I have been depressed?
"But how could you be sad?" you ask.
I've always felt that I must be the best
to ever be worth anything.
How wrong, it seems, I've been!
His love accepts
what's wrong.

All right:
perfectionists
are moved to take control
of all perceived as dangerous;
'survival' comes from doing things just so,
contorting to avoid all hurts.
It never was enough;
I couldn't do
all right.

Holy
means set apart.
none other has this place;
it is reserved for You alone.
There's no one.. no thing... compares with You.
No matter what woos otherwise
I cease to shrink from You;
I give myself
wholly.

Transformed
cannot take place
by coup, or overnight.
There will be struggles, pain ahead.
I must go through them daily, step by step
. . . in place of constant busy-ness,
and then, in brokenness,
just walk with God
transformed.

How deep
should my faith go?
How real is what I've been?
Do I live out what I believe?
"God faithful is, Who brings it all to pass"
. . . not superficiality!
So when God says, "Dive in,"
I'll only ask,
"How deep?"

© Daniel J Ricketts 25 May 2003
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WOW Daniel! oops.gif

You have a knack for structure poems!  :read:  :lovie:

Come back
to simply share
how you cannot concur
or that you’d rather let it lie
a fleeting moment’s inspiration gone
somehow memorialized in words
ineffable – your bowels
let out a crude
comeback.


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These are wonderful!!!  :pilgrim:  :cloud9:

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