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 Oct 27 04, 06:54
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr  |
CRYPTIC DARKNESS
An embittered skewed view of life is fueled by turmoil and strife. Cryptic darkness in one’s soul is not a cherished goal, but simply a persecutory role we’re too paralyzed to control. Lingering sorrow, misery, and regret expose a depraved silhouette, beset with bizarre grim delusions, rendering anxious, depressed conclusions. Surreal fantasies and hallucinations foster illusions rife with confusion. Derailment of cognitive facilities exacerbates hot-tempered hostilities. Paranoia infiltrates fragile emotions, emerging as dysfunctional addictions. A morose manner seeds frustration, thrusting us into social isolation. As we tumble into this gloomy abyss the terror of loneliness truly exists. Skyward we look for a ray of light to extricate us from this plight. Prophetic images cast their sight on a lucent nirvana to end our blight. ·······  ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Oct 27 04, 11:06
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John,
a little walk on the dark side, with all its entities, but leading us back to the light to show there is hope. Larry |
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Oct 27 04, 11:18
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Larry,
There is always hope. I believe in hope. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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Oct 27 04, 13:45
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 3,660 Joined: 23-August 03 From: Somerset, England Member No.: 22 Real Name: Grace Writer of: Poetry & Prose |
Hello John,
 Wow! This was so well crafted, I felt myself falling into the deep depression you describe. You set a mood which becomes blacker and blacker until I thought there was no way I could scrabble my way out of the pit and then you send down a beaming halo of light ~ attached to a strong cord to lift me back up. It is easy to imagine that a nervous breakdown was taking place here. Whew! Think I need a stiff drink to revive myself!  Very clever.  No crits to offer at present. I want to read it a few more times to see if it has the same effect each time.Love Grace 
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Oct 27 04, 14:48
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 4,592 Joined: 31-October 03 From: New Jersey Member No.: 39 Real Name: John Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Larry Carr |
Grace,
Thank you for your remarks. The piece is loosely based on some of the symptons of Schizophrenia and I was hoping to end it on a positive note. JLY ······· ·······Give thanks for your new friends of today, but never forget the warm hugs of your yesterdays.
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