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post Jan 12 17, 14:18
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A solar storm swirls,
mountains appear to collapse,
no comfort but a searing silicon heart
collides with past reality.
A speck of an eye no longer casts allusions,
tendrils yield a new kingdom
they retain the succulence of disease.
Evolution gallops into the unfolding unseen
the metal grey skies
skirmish the thirsting figurines yonder


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Psyche
post Jan 15 17, 19:43
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Great poem, Antony.
Nice alliterations and some inner rhyming fills it with music. That's so appropriate, it reminds me of The Music of the Spheres, by Jamie James. Interesting book if cosmology interests you.
Thanks for sharing,
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post Jan 16 17, 14:43
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Thank you. The idea fir the poem came from silicon, namely it is the core of the earth and was indeed what the earth was hundreds of millions of years ago


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post Jan 27 17, 23:36
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Thank you for the explanation, Antony.
I really like your poem.
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The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.


"There is no life higher than the grasstops
Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind
Pours by like destiny, bending
Everything in one direction."

Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights.



Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

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post Feb 7 17, 08:21
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Hi Antony,

I'm with Syl on this one and really like this poem - great descriptions. Thanks for the explanation which has helped too.


A solar storm swirls,
mountains appear to collapse,
no comfort but a searing silicon heart
collides with past reality.
A speck of an eye no longer casts allusions, ( should this be illusions?)
tendrils yield a new kingdom, (Possibly a comma? Love this line and the following)
they retain the succulence of disease.
Evolution gallops into the unfolding unseen
the metal grey skies
skirmish the thirsting figurines yonder. (Full stop)

Hope something in my thoughts might help.

Eira


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post Feb 8 17, 11:27
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Thank you kindly for your tips. Very helpful as ever


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