Seasonal Languor *** (revision 1) Options

[Eisa]

Seasonal Languor Revision April 2017

My husband offered me pomegranate seeds
from the supermarket shelf; I contemplate
when Hades tempted you. Now four months of
each year you dwell inside the depths with him

while I endure, this suffocating darkness,
exhaustion, craving carbs and sugared tea.
I ache for sunshine’s vitamin D –
and your return with flaming torch.

Demeter’s sorrow is shared, but I detest her
fruitless spread, so slump beneath my quilt
with no desire to surface and get dressed;
warmth coddles all my frigid bones.

I scrutinize the sky for scythe-like wings
returning from overheated realms,
yearn for apodidae, screaming parties
careening madly round rooftops.

As crocus’ wake beneath catkin arms,
you glimmer through the shadows, enfold
me in promises, scythes slash through cirrus
- and I spring into your radiance.

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Seasonal Languor

My husband picked me pomegranate seeds
from the supermarket shelf; I contemplate
when Hades tempted you. Now a third of
each year you inhabit the depths with him

while I endure, this suffocating darkness,
exhaustion, craving carbs and sugared tea.
I ache for sunshine’s vitamin D –
and your return with flaming torch.

Demeter’s sorrow is shared, but I detest her
fruitless spread, so slump beneath my quilt
with no desire to surface and get dressed;
warmth coddles my frigid bones.

I scrutinise the sky for scythe-like wings
returning from overheated realms,
yearn for swift’s screaming parties
careening madly round the rooftops.

As crocus’ wake beneath catkin arms,
your glimmer through the shadows, enfolds
me in promises, scythes slash through cirrus
- and I spring into your radiance.

[Eisa]

Hi Ali,

It's great to see you reading my poem and you have made some valid points to help.

As I said to Daniel, throughout the poem I am talking to Persephone, Greek goddess of springtime, so in St1 when I refer to 'you' it is her (Persephone) I am referring to. She was tempted to eat pomegranate seeds by Hades and then had to spend part of the year with him. Demeter from st2 is Persephone's mother.

The poem has undertones of seasonal affective disorder. Interesting to see you suggest changing contemplate to wonder as in my files I have done that - will change it here.

Eira