Faery Award Winner
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Argh!
I am holding my hands over my ears, arghing.
I'll scream again -
argh -
but
you
can't
see
or
hear.
I'm too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings;
if
I erupted,
it would only
make things worse.
But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb,
replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe:
scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you.
I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and as transparent.
I am dakhma;
Trappist;
bit-lipped;
as a grave.
Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once lured in,
you will never escape ...
I wish ...
Argh!
First Version
Argh!
I am holding my hands over my ears and arghing.
I'll scream again -
argh -
but
you
can't
see
or
hear.
I'm just too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings;
if
I erupted,
it would only
make things worse.
But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb,
replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe:
scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you.
I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and about as transparent.
I am dakhma;
Trappist;
bit-lipped;
as a grave.
Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once sucked in,
you will never get out ...
I wish ...
Argh!
Hey Mike !
Happened on this just before bedtime ! Wow... it's kind of refreshing to read a transgressor like u !! It gets better & better (I admit the beginning didn't exactly attract me...).
But then....
I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and about as transparent.
I am dakhma;
Trappist;
bit-lipped;
as a grave.
Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once sucked in,
you will never get out ...
I wish ...
Argh!
Fantastic !! Shall return here when my eyes stop falling out of their sockets.
Argh !!
Sylvia Shock :p :ring:
Hi Mike
Ah, you have summed up the story of my life. I've been there done that so many times that I've worn out the tshirt, saying nothing wishing I was brave enough to say what I feel, but only thinking about all the things I should have said once I have walked away and also knowing it would achieve nothing to let rip.
A couple of suggestions
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I am holding {my} hands over my ears[,] {and} arghing.
I'll scream again -
argh -
but
you
can't
see
or
hear.
I'm {just} too polite; not wanting to hurt your feelings;
if
I erupted,
it would only
make things worse.
But oh! To have leapt, like you, from the womb,
replete with the sum total of knowledge in the universe:
scientist, artist, wit, wag and all things double you. (.......I don't get what you mean by double you)
I wish I could let rip;
I'm plastic faced,
stiff as tulle,
and {about} as transparent.
I am dakhma;
Trappist;
bit-lipped;
as a grave.
Right, that's it,
you've done it now.
I'm going to be he-rude-ite;
construct an argument so nice;
dense, devilish, daedal,
that once sucked in, (.......perhaps swallowed instead of sucked in)
{you} will never {get out}[escape] ...
I wish ...
Argh!
I enjoyed the read and one day I too will manage to construct a brilliant argument and astound myself.
Nina
Hi Sylvia
Me, a transgressor? Surely not. Can I have a special transgressor badge?
Glad you enjoyed it.
Cheers
Mike
Hi Nina
This was an incident at work when I but my lip instead of taking the easy option and ripping into them.
I like your changes so I'll have a go at them later on.
Cheers
Mike
Tee hee!
Why is it SHE always has the last word? ???
Never mind...
This is a very cool piece Mike! I like how you've shaped eah stana giving focus to the most important aspects.
I'll be back again soon - right now I can't see anything to nit...
Cheers!
~Cleo :D
Hi Cleo
Thank you very much.
Cheers
Mike
Hi Cleo
Thanks you very much. I'm pleased you enjoyed my transgression.
Cheers
Mike :devil:
Hi Cleo !
Psssstt - oh Psyche ....
Why GollY! I know the PUUURRRRFECT award!
The Faery Award fits your idea here.....
Whatcha think?
Arghhhh !!!! :p
But if ya ain't got anything more transgressive for this rebel called Mike, then it's the Faery Award, definitely. I shall try to find my way back to the Nom's forum right away... and once there, I shall make one of my own transgressive suggestions for Noms that nobody takes note of....ha...ha....
Arghhhhh......!!!
Wonderful poem, Mike, don't mind me, I'm the one that starts arguments and then slips off to have a beer with me pals...
Best,
Sylvia
Ooh ta!
I'm of to the Lake District to wander lonely with my Pink Things
in th'ills for a few days.
Catch yer at weekend.
Mike
Hi Mike....
I take it your yellow things are already there? (Somewhat unseasonally).
Have fun.
J.
Ta James
Just killin' time while they complete their ablutions ... snore.
M
M,
You haven't built them a bathroom each??? Rod for your own back, if you ask me!
J.
Congrats Mike on your faery award winning tile!
Well done!
~Cleo :)
Hi Mike
Congratulations on your Faery Award for this poem and the reminder of how I have felt many a time - Argh....
Nina
Well done Mike - "Join MM and get a Free Faery" - now how's that for an offer?
Hope the Lakes' trudging is going well.
All the best, J.
Congratulations on a well deserved award!!
Congrats on you latest award.
Don
Thanks y'all.
Being a transgressor, I would like to give my acceptance speech in the nude, except for my best dickie bow.
Oops ... can hear dibble. Best get dressed again.
Enjoyed being away in the lakes ... have decided to go again next week.
Yeah!
Thanks for the award (It looks like something other than clapping to me).
Cheers
Mike
Hi Mike,
The Nude is fine - I do't think anyone will notice but I'll fight for your right to do it naked. (Did you walk the Lakes like that? Did you carry a copy of Wainright as a quick cover-up for your hairy knees, in case you met someone who couldn't cope?)
As regards the clapping yes, as soon as it appeared - one came to the conclusion that "smilie" was a hedgehog involved in a solitary activity. I can never see it without laughing now. And I never think of Mr Tiggywinkle in the same way.
Do you like that circularity? Betrix Potter was from the Lakes, I believe.
Cheers, J.
Hi James
No Wainright, but I did have a map in a map case to do the job.
Didn't know much about BP but just checked on the web... apparently she was born in South Kensington but gradually developed a base in Sawrey and lived in the lakes most of her life.
William Wordsworth was born in Cockermouth which was a gnats from Keswick where we went last week, and are going this.
Whilst walking around Keswick, I saw a garden with Petunias (the trumpet shaped flower? ... no gardener me) arranged in mini wheel barrows and borders and they reminded me of the Stretford Pageants when I was a kid ... so I have a poem in progress about that, but I am structuring it as a poem within a poem as a flashback.
Cheers
Mike
Hi Sylvia
Thank you for nominating me for the award.
I followed the link, so thanks again. It's a brilliant feeling when someone appreciates your poetry and one that's still fairly new to me, so all the more gratifying.
Cheers
Mike
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