Hi Jeanne, I love seasonal poems and as it is spring here in UK this one made me smile.
I feel you have a few too many 'the's' especially starting lines - especially in the first stanza. I have offered one alternative.
I also feel your poem could be divided quite nicely into a few shorter stanzas rather than one long one.The birth of spring -
[the]
a rennaisance of new life
[the pattern beginning]
begins the pattern again
The intoxicating scent
of blossoms and greenery
the soft tear of a raindrop on a petal
Sp rennaissanceWe slow down and let [our] relaxation
spin us aroun[g]
d a little
carefree and innocent
childlike - we discover anew
the water adrift - our bodies serene
L1 perhaps delete 'our' - sp.. in L2We are full of creativity
and dream of romance
the song of the breeze
the white cottage where
our spirits reside
We relive this vibration
year after year
each time a fresh new outlook
the dew leaves its impression
on our minds
- a new start -
the beginning of a new adventure
I think the last stanza is my favourite.
Snow