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Celestial Spectator (tweaked again - Sept 1st)
Intent, I witness you, amassed to pay
your last respects, reciting snips of script
like actors from an ill-remembered play
performed in yesteryear. I listen, gripped
as timbres swell from favoured hymns I sang
before my mind declined as I grew old.
I weigh each wilted friendship with a pang
of sadness. When I longed to feel consoled
by company, I watched you pass my door
to pray for me in church and ached to hear
your voices, laughter lifting me once more.
I was imprisoned; life became austere.
Habitually you mouthed my name in prayer
it’s now too late to demonstrate your care.
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Celestial Spectator
Intent, I witness you amassed to pay
your last respects, reciting snips of script
like actors from an ill-remembered play
performed in yesteryear. I listen, gripped
as timbres swell from anthems that I sang,
before my mind declined as I grew old.
I ponder our long friendships with a pang
of sadness. When I longed to feel consoled
by company, I watched you pass my door
to pray for me in church and ached to hear
your voices, laughter lifting me once more.
I felt imprisoned; life became austere.
Religiously you mouthed my name in prayer;
you’ve left it late to show how much you care.
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Latest revision & possible title change
Celestial Spectator
Intent, I witness you amassed to pay
your last respects, reciting snips of script
like actors from an ill-remembered play,
performed in yesteryear. I listen, gripped
as timbres swell from anthems I once sang,
before my mind declined and lost control.
I ponder our long friendship with a pang
of sadness. When I longed to feel consoled
by company, I watched you pass my door
to pray for me in church and ached to hear
your voices and your laughter near once more.
Alone, I felt at sea, submerged in fear.
Religiously you mouthed my name in prayer;
you've left it late to show how much you care.
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REVISION 1
Amazed, I gaze as you amass to pay
your last respects; reciting snips of script,
like actors from a half-remembered play,
performed in bygone days. I listen, gripped
as timbres swell from anthems I once sang,
before my mind declined while growing old.
I ponder on our fellowship with pangs
of poignancy, my need to be consoled
in anxious times. I watched you pass my door
to visit church and pray for me. To calm
me with your solace would sustain me more,
for laughter brings relief like healing balm.
I know you all remembered me in prayer;
your presence would allay my stark despair.
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Funeral Witness
Amazed, I gaze as friends amass to pay
their last respects; reciting snips of script,
like actors from a half-remembered play,
performed in bygone days. I listen, gripped
as timbres swell from anthems I once sang,
before my mind declined while growing old.
I ponder on past fellowships with pangs
of poignancy, desires to be consoled
in anxious times. I watched them pass my door
to visit church and pray for me. To calm
my inner turmoil would sustain me more;
anoint my core with laughter’s healing balm.
A member of this Church for fifty years;
their prayers could not alleviate my tears.
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