Faux-ku is my own brain child, developed over a long time of playing with haiku and senryu. My
Light, so to speak, dabbles in wit, and hopefully it has its place in haiku/senryu-type poetry. This form can have seriousness, but it will always be dressed in
Light clothing.
(Just remember, these threads are for us to PRACTICE in! Let NO ONE suppose that I'm here to be a teacher. I AIN'T! But practicing in short forms, I believe, can improve one's ability in
other forms, including Haiku. However, I AM the expert in faux-ku merely because it is my own baby! I'm willing to engage a tutor to bring it to maturity, if one is here and available to me.
The absolute criteria for faux-ku:
1) a fetching title [ haiku and senryu never have a title ]
( title must be or have a play on words )
2) haiku/senryu form [ two snapshots ]
[ 5-7-5 syllables... or 3-2-3 beats -- OR LESS ! ]
one snapshot in two lines
another snapshot in one line
or vice versa
3) word-play in each snapshot (as well as in title)
Initial Samples:
high coopfoxy but chicken –
red hens turned into roosters
often high in trees © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002out to launchthree nautical girls --
malled by low-price salers
during their noon break © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 loud warningred sails in sunset
clash crewedly once a blue moon;
mutin’ ears marooned © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 stocking up downwhite sales for son sets
precedent: Martha Stewart
fitted stock preferred © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 dark fearsscared by Dad's visits?
at bottom had you been switched
to a light sleeper? © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 sub lime piecesyou've run out? blimey!
just cut up with ripe lemons
to post on our glass © Daniel J Ricketts 10 Dec 2002 Now it's YOUR turn!DeLightingly, Daniel 8)
P.S. One other concern... We reserve the responsibility to throw Sue out for several days at a time if she shows signs of addiction!