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> Walt Whitman Snippet Challenge, For the Poet in You!
Cleo_Serapis
post Nov 9 03, 13:07
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Hi all. YEP - here I go again!  ???

I thought it might be fun to try and use several of Walt Whitman's Poetry snippets and form a new poem using partial lines from his various poems.

I will supply the lines. You can use them as the beginning of a line or mix them up as long as the snippets remain intact. Good luck!

Here are the snippets you must use in your poem (in any order). Feel free to rhyme or write free verse or any other type of poetry style to your liking!
There are 12 snippets. You must use at least 8.

Cheers and good luck!

~Cleo  :pharoah:

the bleeding drops
spirit that trails
hold me powerless
her shrouded hope
Swim the delicate
Nature's pulses reaped
there among the rocks
when I sit alone
the dalliance of
in the starlight
the gossamer thread
Pour softly down


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post Nov 9 03, 13:59
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NET BOUND

Pour softly down the gossamer threads
that hold me powerless, the bleeding drops of dew.
Once packaged, wrapped, I become her shrouded hope
of supper, in the starlight there among the rocks.

Nature's pulses reaped
:
guilty, I, of the dalliance of the web,
where and when I sit alone and apprehensive,
til a flickering dusk signals my impending doom.

I am nothing if not the spirit that trails
the thought, as I swim the delicate
nets of ether, captured now as never before,
like a fly trapped in deceitful spinnings;

now, by my sensor's tremblings, I feel the end is nigh,
my fate's in spittle sealed, Ms. Spider's on the way .....

Alan McAlpine Douglas

Walt Whitman phrases used :

the gossamer thread
Pour softly down
hold me powerless
the bleeding drops
her shrouded hope
in the starlight
there among the rocks
Nature's pulses reaped
the dalliance of
when I sit alone
spirit that trails
swim the delicate
 
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post Nov 12 03, 13:59
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 Sounds in the Dark

In the starlight of heaven and darkness
when I sit alone, waiting for you,
faint whispers that I  hear
pour softly down, voice so distant.

Your words, hold me powerless
restrained, tense, there among the rocks,
through the leaves and branches
the bleeding drops, like lyrics of love.

I swim the delicate stream of trust,
tread the gossamer thread  of life,
wonder if her shrouded hope will fail,
that nature’s pulses reaped.

Yet in the dalliance of my life
strong is the spirit that trails.
 
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Cleo_Serapis
post Dec 6 03, 18:30
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You two really have a knack for these challenges!

I shall have to write more then I see!

Now I know when my muse is on holiday, just where to bury my little head!

NO - not in the pyramids!  :huh:

Excellent tiles!

:pharoah2  :dance:  :operagal:  :holly:  :blueorn:  :cheer:


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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings

Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind.

"I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter

Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!

"Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.

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Cybele
post Dec 13 03, 03:01
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Attempting to write in the modern idiom. blush21.gif

Walt Whitman challenge

WAITING

the bleeding drops of tomato sauce
creep across the formica surface

like a wounded spirit that trails
its sanguine gore inexorably

to the edge of the precipice
to pour softly down and pool

there among the rocks
of unswept crumbs

here I sit alone waiting
doodling mindlessly in the blood

at my feet, two audacious ants
heroically swim the delicate tide


their efforts hold me powerless
my judgement anaesthetized

with the dalliance of hope
my mind screams “go now!”

I will give you just ten minutes
and then I am leaving.



“All rights reserved by Grace Galton as an unpublished work”


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post Dec 13 03, 15:00
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ENDLESS WIND POWER

When I sit alone and contemplate
what nature's pulses reaped,
trying to swim the delicate reaches
beyond the realms of breaking wind,
that airless harvest does hold me powerless;

The gossamer thread
of sanity,
the bleeding drops of life I hold so dear,
pour softly down the drains;
as to my spirit, that trails along
while the body gasps, for cleaner air;

Mother Nature sighs, accepts her gross mistake,
there among the rocks and shards
of failed experiments, her shrouded hope
that the dalliance of her baser side,
in the starlight, with a has-bean, might one day be forgotten .....

Alan McAlpine Douglas



Walt Whitman phrases used, by verse :

when I sit alone
Nature's pulses reaped
Swim the delicate
hold me powerless

the gossamer thread
the bleeding drops
Pour softly down
spirit that trails

there among the rocks
her shrouded hope
the dalliance of
in the starlight
 
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Larry
post Mar 27 16, 09:28
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Rhyme Royal Stanza



The bleeding drops pour softly down upon
the gossamer thread of her shrouded hope
and Nature’s pulses reaped what had been sown.
For there, among the rocks, I see the scope
of man’s demise. A greedy misanthrope!
The dalliance of death’s spirit that trails
will hold me powerless when mankind fails.



Snippets used: the bleeding drops, pour softly down, the gossamer thread, her shrouded hope, nature’s pulses reaped, there among the rocks, the dalliance of, spirit that trails, hold me powerless


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Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers.
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Merlin
post Mar 27 16, 14:16
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Here's a quick snip for ya, Larry. I used longer lines in WW's style.

There among the rocks where time appears as but a spirit
that trails like the gossamer thread through late September
crimson afternoons, there, when I sit alone in the dalliance of 
Mother Nature's pulses, reaped and winnowed, I feel
her shrouded hope, her veiled concern for creatures large and small. 

There, in the bleeding drops of late September scarlet,
I swim the delicate waters that pour softly down
to a far-off bay; they hold me powerless like a farewell swan,
and as the moon casts shadows over blue-green hilltops,
I see in the starlight Mother Nature smiling, smiling,
Mother Nature smiling in the starlight.



1. there among the rocks
2. spirit that trails 
3. the gossamer thread 
4. when I sit alone
5. the dalliance of 
6. Nature's pulses reaped
7. her shrouded hope 
8. the bleeding drops 
9. swim the delicate 
10. pour softly down
11. hold me powerless 
12. in the starlight


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