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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ ARCHIVES -> Chapbook Competitions _ Old Man

Posted by: Larry Dec 15 07, 14:21

Old Man

or

Reflections

A wrinkled brow, once smooth with youth and ignorant of time
is furrowed deep o'er steel grey eyes, sunk back into his face.
Thin hair, age whitened, crowns what once was visage, thought sublime
and strange glass orbs, perched on a nose, look odd and out of place.

A chin of chiseled stone has been replaced with two or three
weak mounds of flesh which quiver now and then in silent rage.
All this upon an aching, frail and wizened neck. I see
skin, weathered, much the worse for wear, around bones like a cage.

Broad shoulders, stooped and rounded, still remain within his mind
as work gnarled, calloused hands, bestow a rough sandpaper touch.
Clothes, hung upon his frame, seem much too large and unrefined,
fit yesterday. A young man, which tomorrows came to clutch,

still stares at me each morn and nods his head, it seems, with glee.
With unbelieving awe and wonderment upon my face
I stare right back and recognize what has become of me.
The pennants of long life are worn with pride; not sad disgrace.

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Dec 15 07, 14:29

Thank you for your entry into Odin's Opposition Larry!

Perhaps you'll rise up, drink from the Well of Wisdom and be crowned the 'bringer of victory'?

Best of luck in the battle!

~Mosaic Musings Staff

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis May 16 08, 06:27

Congratulations Larry on your Bronze placement!

You have risen up, drank from the Well of Wisdom and have been crowned the ‘bringer of victory’!

Well done!

Posted by: Psyche May 16 08, 11:38

Dear Larry,

It's really a privilege to have you at MM!! I think others will agree. You've left me wordless...LOL...

Funny thing, we both wrote about age, except my poem is a sad one, as the person is senile.
You, on the other hand, can write in glorious style, with a sense of humor, about yourself looking in the mirror...Impressive and truthful and a tribute to 'the pennants of long life are worn with pride; not disgrace'.... Just so! But you're just a kid, not old at all, I saw it in your profile....

Senility is no disgrace either, it just happens.... A pity, so sad...

Congrats again!
Sylvia ***

Posted by: AMETHYST May 17 08, 18:00

Congratulations Larry,

I agree with Sylvia, we're lucky to have you around to inspire and demonstrate just how technique and true skill makes a difference - Wonderful Job ...

Hugs, Liz