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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ Fixed Form and Rhyming Poetry for Critique -> Herme's Homilies _ An Autumnal Moment.

Posted by: Rhymer Oct 2 20, 14:00

Autumnal leaves keep falling,
with their colours fading fast,
as winter’s days come calling,
their beauty will not last.

With their colours fading fast,
leaves lie heavy on the grass,
their beauty will not last,
as autumnal days now pass.

Leaves lie heavy on the grass:
having drifted ankle deep:
as autumnal days now pass,
so Nature goes to sleep.

Having drifted ankle deep,
as a blanket for the soil.
so Nature goes to sleep,
and rest from daily toil.

As a blanket for the soil,
and keep winter’s cold at bay,
and rest from daily toil,
is ever Nature’s way.

To keep winter’s cold at bay.
As winter days come calling,
until Spring returns our way:
autumnal leaves keep falling.

Rhymer. October 2nd, 20230.


Posted by: Psyche Oct 3 20, 10:49

QUOTE (Rhymer @ Oct 2 20, 16:00 ) *
Autumnal leaves keep falling,
with their colours fading fast,
as winter’s days come calling,
their beauty will not last.

With their colours fading fast,
leaves lie heavy on the grass,
their beauty will not last,
as autumnal days now pass.

Leaves lie heavy on the grass:
having drifted ankle deep:
as autumnal days now pass,
so Nature goes to sleep.

Having drifted ankle deep,
as a blanket for the soil.
so Nature goes to sleep,
and rest from daily toil.

As a blanket for the soil,
and keep winter’s cold at bay,
and rest from daily toil,
is ever Nature’s way.

To keep winter’s cold at bay.
As winter days come calling,
until Spring returns our way:
autumnal leaves keep falling.

Rhymer. October 2nd, 20230.



What a beautiful rhyming poem, Denis. To think we're already in Spring and it snowed heavily yesterday.
I love Autumn and your poem's imagery is stunning. I'll return with more time. All the best, Sylvia


Posted by: JustDaniel Oct 3 20, 16:19

Excellent job with this rhyming form, Denis, with fine imagery and perfect rhyming and meter. I cannot recall what the form is called (or if it is a specific form) in which the second line of each stanza becomes the first of the next.

deLighting to read, Daniel sun.gif

Posted by: Rhymer Oct 3 20, 16:51

Thank you both for your encouraging words. Fall or Autumn as it is known in many lands, is certainly very evident here in Southern Ontario. My past days have been busy and fully occupied with the clearing of debris and leaves thanks to a light frost and strong winds which are the first signals of summer being on the way out with no return until next year. I thought the Pantoum format suited my thoughts. Great to know someone is reading my efforts. Sparse of late. Enjoy your late snowfall Sylvia and hope you have a great Spring. Ciao for now. Denis.

Posted by: JustDaniel Oct 12 20, 06:11

Ah, yes, Pantoum!

So you've inspired my latest Workshop / Contest in AllPoetry.com, Denis!

https://allpoetry.com/contest/2762718-Pantoum-Workshop---Contest--Thanksgiving

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