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 Jul 30 15, 19:09
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 Ornate Oracle  Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori  |
Flower- and Pollen-Gathering Time
Where your face burns and tickles, friends may say, "The woods are lovely, and the shade of trees is filled with hues, though nothing gold can stay." (Your allergies won't go till there's a freeze!) A small bird flew just then to wash the steps ahead while you bent in the undergrowth to rid yourself of the great harvest. Strep is on your mind from doctors' foolish sloth. You dare not tell your plight to these who share your place among the infinities; some opine the world's a better place with silent prayer. Your time to be with nature's in decline. One luminary clock has said you've had that flower-gathering time; no moment's sad. © MLee Dickensson 2015 Robert Frost snippets used, in order of appearance: Where your face burns and tickles The woods are lovely and the shade of trees Nothing gold can stay A small bird flew To wash the steps bent in the undergrowth Of the great harvest our place among the infinities Some say the world One luminary clock had that flower ·······  ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Jul 30 15, 20:30
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 Creative Chieftain Posts: 11,376 Joined: 15-June 07 From: Springfield, Louisiana Member No.: 446 Real Name: Larry D. Jennings Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Just wondered in. |
Bravo Daniel,
Glad to see you joining in the fun. I guess you read Lori's post above yours suggesting Eric also post his piece in the challenge forum: Robert Frost Snippet Challenge. I did enjoy your tongue in cheek bit about some of the more onerous thing which summer brings; allergies for one. Never having had to worry about that myself, I just see others suffer. Congratulations on using all twelve snippets. Well Done! Larry ······· ·······When power leads man toward arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations. When power narrows the areas of man's concern, poetry reminds him of the richness and diversity of his existence. When power corrupts, poetry cleanses.
John Fitzgerald Kennedy Kindness is a seed sown by the gentlest hand, growing care's flowers. Larry D. Jennings MM Award Winner     |
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Jul 30 15, 22:42
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 2,085 Joined: 24-May 04 From: Time, Immoral Member No.: 66 Writer of: Poetry |
Hi JD,
I shall echo Larry's reply above. Enjoyed your use of the snips. Your bird line reminded me of the blackbird nesting in my pine tree (everything with needles is a pine tree for me). The parent birds took the young's droppings to keep the nest tidy, and the best place to drop those was right smack on my truck. Durn critters! This year the truck is in the garage so they be-splattered the roadway at the end of my driveway - not so bad. Luckily I don't have steps. Keep em coming! Merlin ······· ······· |
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Oct 15 15, 17:47
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
Well done, Daniel!
 I did have to chuckle as I am dealing with the inevitable autumn blahs - chest coldish kind of thing. These snippets are tough to fit metrically - and I enjoyed the read!  Cheers! ~Cleo 
······· ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner    |
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Oct 28 15, 08:00
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 4,599 Joined: 4-August 03 From: Birmingham, England Member No.: 12 Real Name: Eira Needham Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
Hi Daniel,
Its so good to see new posts in this forum. You have done a splendid job of using the snippets here. I love the informal tone of this and the way you've brought in ailments that affect so many. I have really enjoyed reading this. Eira I am posting in serens as I have not written any R&M for a while. ······· ·······Live one day at a time -it's simpler that way.
Laugh loud & often - it's medicinal. Write from the heart - it's therapeutic. Beauty comes from within - the outer is just skin! Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here! MM Award Winner   |
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