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 Nov 5 07, 21:39
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny  |
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whispering to me "I'm here" sunshine . ·······  ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner      |
  
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Nov 6 07, 12:05
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 3,822 Joined: 3-August 03 From: Florida Member No.: 10 Real Name: Elizabeth Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori Kanter |
Hi Terry,
I don't normally post in this forum too often, especially with Haiku, only because I am extremely left in the dark with it. However, as I tumbled in here and read this I connected immediately on difference levels. The first line, with the use of the word 'whispering' gave me an immediate sense of dark/covert or a lonesome feel, which is wonderfully turned by L3 with sunshine. This worked wonders for me. It gave me a sense like the narrator is in a darkness or dark time and subconsciously (whisperings from a greater source of light/energy) is he/she confirmed that light/God/better times are right there... Now I am not sure if this is anything of what was meant, but really comes through for me... sometimes, we associate an interpretation by our own state of mind or experiences in the past... I enjoyed this ... and haven't nits with this... just some interpretation and hopefully this will help you to see if your original intent is coming through. Hugs, Liz ······· ·······Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more details, click here!
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Nov 10 07, 05:37
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny |
Hi Liz,
 Thanks so very much for your in-depth and beautiful reply. I'm delighted that my 'lille poem incited such a reaction in you.  Because these ku' are supposed to leave the work up to the reader they are often/always open to different interpretations, and each is valid. I think the most important meaning is the one the reader finds. Yours and mine are quite close though  Cheers !! . ······· ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner |
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