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 Aug 3 07, 08:34
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 Laureate Legionnaire  Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny  |
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her rambling rose garden nurtured vines bloom . ·······  ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner      |
  
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Aug 3 07, 10:18
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
QUOTE (Terocon101 @ Aug 3 07, 09:34 )  her rambling rose garden nurtured vines bloom I'm assuming that this is the fruit of your studying the various forms that haiku have taken, as I believe some say that they were originally in one line? This has a multitude of possibilities for emphasis, depending on what part of speech is several of the words you've chosen. Well-done. Let's see (not suggestions; just possible meanings, depending on emphasis): her rambling rose garden nurtured vines bloom her rambling (a)rose garden nurtured vines bloom her rambling rose garden nurtured vines bloom her rambling rose garden nurtured vines bloom Lightly, Daniel 
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Aug 4 07, 08:02
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Laureate Legionnaire Posts: 376 Joined: 28-May 07 From: Co. Galway, Ireland Member No.: 440 Real Name: Terry O C Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Ephiny |
Hey Daniel,
Yeah, I've been finding out quite a bit lately about the tip of the ku iceberg. Glad you found that one-liner workable, I didn't think it worked that well in 3-line format. It'll probably be my one and only one-liner. There is an actual rambling rose variety, my mother has one in her garden. Its quite an inquisitive plant, lol, always exploring nearby shrubs and bushes and getting into trouble. It needs quite a bit of guidance as it grows otherwise it get wayward and unruly. Luckily the gardener is a patient woman with a caring nature, that rose bush has matured fully and its blossoms are quite lovely  Ps. Most of our my sisters and brothers have taken cuttings and the cycle continues. LOL ······· ·······Terry
light lights light --Raymond Rosliep "The imagination imitates. It is the critical spirit that creates." --Oscar Wilde MM Award Winner |
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