on a worn out house, faux ku Options

[JustDaniel]

_on a worn out hous_e


downspoutd i s m i s s i n g

roof's need to relieve itself ^.._.

leaves mined in gutter


© MLee Dickens'son

[Terocon101]

Hey Daniel,

Lol, my minds alway is the gutter so...nuff said.

I can only say that I've heard of out-houses, never had any experience of them.

Anyway, strange one this, a dilapidated out-house that collapses and leaves the occupant stuck in the gutter, yuk. Thanks for sharing. LOL

[JustDaniel]

Thank ya for visiting, Terry...

and one might say that there are THREE de-stinked images here. Did you catch all of them?

skatin' off Lightly, Daniel

[Terocon101]

Probably not Daniel,

But I do try, lol.

Let me see, this first line is self-explanatory missing downspout(d) That d is a mystery, I thought it was a typo and forgot to mention it.

Roof's need to relieve itself, with the three dots like the wind blowing droplets off the roof.

Leaves mind in gutter, the ol' out-house collapses from the strain of rain-water on the roof and a gust. Leaving a rather horrible mess, that I didn't enjoy seeing. hehe.

Ok, lay it on me, what did I miss??? I was probably too distracted by the crap all over the place, lol, yuk

[JustDaniel]

Well, then, Terry... Let me not leave your mined to compost:

It's not that this is a totally serious piece... though of course all experimentation and working with any form is serious business. PLAY produces many a gem of poetry, at least as by-product.

Think of the worn-out house as a human body. Think of the roof as the brain. Think of the body's outlet, in at least two senses, seeking some kind of relief... and you'll have the third 'meaning'. Be careful, however, not to leave your(self) min(e)d in the gutter.

Of course the other two are the worn outhouse and the worn-out house. Also think of the downspout DISMISSING the roof's need for relief... or for that matter, just missing ? Ever done that?

sprinkin' Lightly, Daniel

[Terocon101]

Ah I see, said the blind man...

This is a bit of fun as you said, but no less valid for that. The Sanctimonious ones who declare that the morose and deep is real poetry and that just because a piece has humor it is not 'proper' poetry, they bore the eyes of my head.

Although I enjoy wit and humor in a poem(or anywhere) and experimentation and the 'pushing of limits' is always good in my book, it is possible to overload a poem. I think a balance has to be maintained between the weaving of layers and the enjoyment/flow of the read, too much goings-on can be confusing in the read, leaving the reader scratching their head. (As I often do)

I'm not really speaking of you or your poetry here, just in general. If I may be so bold, I think myself and most of the people who read your writings know there will be 'something else' going on, its your 'much-loved' style.

Ok, I've a bit of work to do, gotta run.

[JustDaniel]

Greetings, Terry!

Sorry to be so late in replying. I've had to stay away awhile; I've gotten further behind at work, but right now I'm taking a day off at home... where I'm doing some of my paperwork! Thank you for approving of my 'signature' in much of my poetry. I hope you don't get tired of it.

deLighting in playing seriously, Daniel