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Posted by: JustDaniel Jul 2 17, 20:09

... a specific response to Larry's fine sonnet, https://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=17139&st=0#entry147522 in Hermes


Naughty Loan

I too am so impressed to read your work;
It seems that I've neglected reading here.
So here I am and trouncing like a jerk,
I leave the path and venture without fear

of stepping on your feet or on some home
of insects, vermin, birds or who knows what
to wander off where'er my eyes may roam
and run or play or simply rest my butt.

A cautious step is something that I've not
been taught, perhaps is now too late to learn.
If I go on like this, will I be caught
and sent away to somewhere I will burn

forever for my lacking social skills
and racking up so many hidden kills?

© MLeeDickensson 23 June 2017

in response to Larry D. Jennings' https://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=17139&st=0#entry147522

Posted by: Ali zonak Jul 3 17, 07:50

Very humorous, Daniel;
good clean fun. I might question the rhyme "what and butt." "What" sounds okay in conjunction with the softer "but,"
However, it's still a passable near-rhyme. Delighted to read your sonnet, Ali

Posted by: Eisa Jul 4 17, 17:23

You and Larry are certainly the sonneteers of MM, Daniel. This one is good fun! Enjoyed.

Eira

Posted by: JustDaniel Jul 6 17, 00:11

Thanks, Ali. I do like to write response pieces, and humor is something built-in for me.

I'm curious how you may pronounce "butt"; I have always pronounced it exactly as "but"... and least it's that way where I grew up and in each of the places I've lived: WA state, southern CA, W. Florida, Phila suburbs, South Jersey. I'll be very interested in your answer, since I can't imagine how else it is pronounced.

deLighting in your sharing, Daniel

Posted by: JustDaniel Jul 6 17, 00:14

It's an honor to be mentioned in the same sentence with Larry. I'm glad that you appreciated the fun, Eira!

deLightingly, Daniel

Posted by: Larry Jul 6 17, 09:25

Hi Daniel,

Yes, I did read, laugh at and enjoy your retort to my “Not Alone” and appreciate the links you provided for the reader in reference to my sonnet. You have me blushing with your statement that you feel honored to be mentioned in the same sentence with myself when it comes to sonnets. To be able to come up with even a tongue-in-cheek response is, to me, very admirable. You ain’t no slouch when it comes to writing sonnets. I’d have to say, “right back at you” because I admire all your work; even the off-the-wall stuff we trade with each other over in Karnak.

Larry

Posted by: JustDaniel Jul 6 17, 13:09

... and it's a joy to do so, Larry!

deLightingly, Daniel