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[Guest_Zeus˛_*]

Nature’s Magic Markers ….or

The Tanning Process

That big yellow ball in the sky,
expose yourself too long, you fry,
beams down plenty of UV rays,
even sneaks thru a light haze.

Day one, color yourself a light pink,
at poolside, sipping a drink,
day two, showing a bit of red,
fortunately evenly spread.

Next day it rained, process begins,
some changes within the skin,
use the marker with the very light tan,
getting darker, that is the plan.

Shades of tan markers, neatly in a row,
slowly taking on a nice glow,
end of the week, the tanned god look,
not once subjected to a sun cook.

Every day, lay back in my pool chair,
looking good, of that I am aware,
notice the gals, giving a stare,
at least not one of despair.

Brings back memories of South Pacific days,
tropical islands, felt like a castaway,
back to the present, into the pool,
on a hot day, one way to keep cool.

[Guest_Tao_*]

Greetings Larry,

So that's where you've been hiding out - poolside? God, I wish I was back in the South Pacific, tan or no tan. I'm surprised that I'm still holding on to the pigments nine months after leaving Hawaii. May your markers last as long.  :sun:

Love the first stanzas. I hopped along with your light hearted rhythm as if running 'round the pool until...here are my suggestions to tighten it up a little.

Next day it rained, process begins,
some changes within the skin,
use the marker with the very light tan, - remove the?
getting darker, that is the plan.

Shades of tan markers, neatly in a row, - remove tan, already established?
slowly taking on a nice glow,
end of the week, the tanned god look,
not once subjected to a sun cook.

Every day, lay back in my pool chair, - remove my?
looking good, of that I am aware,
notice the gals, giving a stare,
at least not one of despair.

Brings back memories of South Pacific days, - remove days?
tropical islands, felt like a castaway, - remove a?
back to the present, into the pool,
on a hot day, one way to keep cool.

Please spare your lightning bolts as I'm a slow ducker! Humbly,

David

[Aphrodite]

Hello Larry~

How are you doing? This is such a "sunny" piece! (could'nt resist)  :)  

You did a great job in communicating how sunburns, although at first feel and look good, end up coming back to haunt us!

Reminiscing about your precious memories in the South Pacific is touching and sweet too!

Shades of tan markers, neatly in a row,
slowly taking on a nice glow,
end of the week, the tanned god look,
not once subjected to a sun cook.
Thanks, for sharing and wear your sunscreen. (I do!!!) :pharoah2

Take care~
Lindi

[Siren]

With our blazing sun I can sit and wish I was there on the poolside too.

Larry,

always something unique in your words.

Enjoyed this.
D

[Cleo_Serapis]

Hi Larry!  :wizard:

What a fun piece! Of course, I turn a red lobster fry myself, BUT that's another story!  :karate: This was a good look into the inevitable!

Please T or T...
~Cleo  :cheer:

You should probably add one syllable here to make it match the rest of S1:
even sneaks thru a light subtle haze.

Day one, color yourself a light pink,
Here - a slight switch on words for meter:
Color yourself on day one a light pink,

at poolside, {while} sipping a drink, **For meter again

Next day it rained, process begins,
{now}some changes within the skin,
use the marker with the very light tan,
***To keep the 8 beats per line. slight change above to:
use the marker, very light tan,

Shades of tan markers, neatly in a row,
slowly taking on showing a nice {neat}glow,
end of the week, the tanned god look,
not once subjected to a sun sun's cook.

Every day, lay back lounge in my pool chair,
looking good, of that I am I'm aware,
notice the gals, giving a stare,
at least not one of {pale} despair.

Brings back memories of South I remember Pacific days,
tropical islands, felt like a castaway,
back to the present, into the pool,
on a hot day, one way to keep cool.

[Eisa]

Hi Larry

Oh this one made me feel I was on holiday -- ( I need a break)

I did like Lori's suggestion of pale despair  :pharoah2


Hope your tan lasts a long time


Snow  :lovie: