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 Egyptian  Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry  |
Hi Folks,
I've loved all your haikus so very much that after reading all of them again, I've decided to begin a SEPARATE thread for Interactive Haiku. So, please use this thread for the "train fashion haiku" and the initial haiku thread for standard haiku. Thanks so much, y'll!! How about attempting to write one a day for 15 or 30 days in a row? Anyone game to commit to this endeavor? I'll begin this thread: Weather is crazy .. how can anyone predict capricious nature © D R Harris - 28 Jan 2004 The next author will begin their haiku with "capricious nature". OK Everyone, let's goooooo!!!! 
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Jan 29 04, 02:09
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Dear Dolly
This may not be quite the direction that you hoped this would go, but you know, an eternal truth is an eternal truth ! COUNTERPOINT Capricious nature : what you can have you don't want; that's women for you ! Love Alan |
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Jan 29 04, 05:40
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
Yes, Alan, absolutely! Wonderful!
they make warmth for their men; keepers of the flames © D R Harris - 1/29/04 |
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Jan 29 04, 05:49
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Dear Dolly
Your last line is 6 syl, so I've shortened it here : Keepers of the flame the hearth, home, and family ? Demand equal rights ! Love Alan |
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Jan 30 04, 04:07
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
Thank you so much, Alan! What a goof I made, but it's neither the first nor the last, I'm afraid. I've taken the liberty of correcting my haiku. Here's my rendering for this day/night:
Demand equal rights when faced with voting choices good for all concerned © D R Harris - 1/29/04 |
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Feb 1 04, 18:43
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"good for all concerned?"
the cotton dandelion asks as he floats away. |
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Feb 1 04, 19:58
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 Mosaic Master  Posts: 18,892 Joined: 1-August 03 From: Massachusetts Member No.: 2 Real Name: Lori Kanter Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Imhotep |
As he floats away,
flicks of powdered dust invade in a rising cloud. ·······  ·······"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the Rings
Collaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. Kanter Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!  "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner           |
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Feb 1 04, 20:37
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WHETHER FORECAST
In a rising cloud there should be enough moisture for a morning wash ..... Alan McAlpine Douglas |
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Feb 1 04, 23:20
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 Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
base ‘n’ ewer
for a mourning wash slip on bathroom rug… head first into toilet bowl © M Lee Dickens’ son (Daniel) 01 Feb 2004 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Feb 2 04, 00:38
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
into toilet bowl we dumped all the poor dead fish next life float, no swim © D R Harris - 1 Feb 2004 |
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Feb 3 04, 08:23
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
waste-deep advice
next lie ~ float, don’t swim; your flailing draws a tension… a sinking feeling M Lee Dickens’ son (Daniel) 03 Feb 2004 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Feb 3 04, 08:32
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FLYING FISH OR FISHING FLIES ?
a-sinking feeling : up is down and down is up, neither fish nor fowl ! Alan McAlpine Douglas |
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Feb 3 04, 16:34
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
Have We Gone A-Petting?
neither fish nor fowl are my horses, dogs, cats and goats all love just the same © D R Harris - 3 February 2004 All rights reserved as an unpublished work |
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Feb 4 04, 20:50
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PARTS OF THE TRUTH, THE PARTIAL TRUTH, AND NOTHING BUT THE PARTIAL TRUTH
All love "just" the same except adversorials : those half-truth lawyers Alan McAlpine Douglas |
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Feb 4 04, 23:28
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
those half-truth layers
– the hen party egg-head chicks – hatch new ones daily ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Feb 4 04, 23:41
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
hatch gnu ones daily our zoo pushes to keep up one per year is born © D R Harris - 4 February 2004 All rights reserved as an unpublished work. |
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Feb 5 04, 05:24
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Dear Dolly
Couldn't figure out what you meant until I checked back to Daniel's last line. I find that you have used a very witty "same sound" word, but have to tell you it is spelled "gnu" ! Love Alan BLESSED SLEEP, FOR ONCE One per year is borne, dreaded too - rather sleep than party, New Year's Eve. Alan McAlpine Douglas |
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Feb 5 04, 06:22
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
Thank you, Alan! You saved me!
 I've amended the blight!Have a great day! Dolly 
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Feb 5 04, 06:31
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Ornate Oracle Posts: 18,560 Joined: 2-August 03 From: Southwest New Jersey, USA Member No.: 6 Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr. Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Lori |
ur in al their dreams
party knew your sieve would clog eventually… when you would be pissed © M Lee Dickens’ son 05 Feb 2004 ······· ·······Slow down; things will go faster!
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Feb 7 04, 21:41
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Egyptian Posts: 427 Joined: 5-August 03 From: Oregon, USA Member No.: 8 Real Name: Dolly Writer of: Poetry |
when you would be pieced again into their picture; life returns to bliss © D R Harris - 7 February 2004 |
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