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JustDaniel
post Jan 3 05, 07:54
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49er Nuggets are poems of 49 syllables arranged in 13 lines of 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 6 5 4 3 2 and 1 syllables, stating a 'nugget' of wisdom, perspective, insight, information, etc. preferably with a twist.  A proper Nugget is to be Titled with a word-twist of some variety as well.  I 'invented' the form in Dec, 2004.

Here are a three examples:

ore naught

why
would I
e’er attempt
to make a mark?
is there a purpose?
should I merely aim to
spread a little serendip?
it teases me to forge
limp, bleating poems
seeming pointless
‘till they wake
renewed
Light


© Daniel J Ricketts 20 Dec 2004

in form I’ll query

Why
would I
want to kill
ambition’s will
by ripping form up;
would this freedom limit
me or others banging heads
to get our feelings down
in printed booklets,
each with pages
bound in one
accord,
no?


© Daniel J Ricketts 21 Dec 2004

‘s no fun

snow
falling’s
delightful
if you see clear
across your driveway
or don’t work this morning
or have waked at a ski lodge
but if you’ve got two feet
and wife says ‘shove it’
it just feels cold
as it blows
on red
nose


© MLee Dickens’son 28 Dec 2004


Have fun!

deLightingly, Daniel  sun.gif


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post Jan 3 05, 08:15
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Hi Daniel,

Happy New Year to you.

These nugget-shaped nuggets are pure gold - under your pen, at least.

A great contribution to poetry forms and some interesting pro-forma (sorry!) arguments for forms, within form. The snow was enjoyably clever, too.

I shalln't try one of these - but under your great direction they are very impressive.

Best wishes, James.
 
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post Jan 3 05, 17:58
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Happy New Year Daniel PartyFavor.gif and to your new form! Paci.gif

This looks very intriguing to me and one I would most like to try!  :detective:

I'll be back soon!

Thanks for this new form!
Cheers!
Cleo  :sun:


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post Jan 7 05, 08:24
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Thank you for your kind words, James... and I hope you change your mind and try some of these yourself!

Cleo, I'll be looking forward to your return to put your flair into a couple!

deLightingly, Daniel  sun.gif

daDUM

dumb
down my
poet’s tree
so you can swing
with simple boughing,
meting out my feet-steps
one by one across your page
‘til all have seen I’ve tried
your patience, yet you
still go stretching
out your mind
until ~
duh!


© Daniel J Ricketts 21 Dec 2004


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Larry
post Aug 1 22, 08:46
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Hello Daniel,
I saw your contest on AP about 9 months ago but wasn't quick-witted enough to enter before it closed. I was intrigued by your new form and thought I would give it a try. You know me; I always have to make a difficult form even more so. I was able to hash out two double acrostic 49er Nuggets. I wanted to have you see them first because it it your creation. Hope they meet with your approval:

SOME GOLD IS NOT – LOOK IN A MIRROR

Fool Scold

School
ought to
mentor so
each man will seek
guidance, not ennui
of a foolish question
like “Does gold have an aura?”
Digging a hole may seem
in vein, or did I
spell it wrong for
new miner?
Ore’s no
tour!




DASHING DREAMS – GENTLY ON A WHIM

Dirt Pour

Dig
a hole
somewhere when
hoping to get
instant riches will
never help you or pay
good money. Your search is so
damned wasteful that you can
raze an area...
Each day you plow
an old patch
more; I
scream.



Let me know what you think!

Larry


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post Aug 8 22, 08:00
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Heavens, Larry! I don't know how you do this! I doubt that I could match your ingenuity!

P.S. In your second one, your ninth line has one too many syllables.


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Larry
post Aug 8 22, 09:27
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Hey Daniel, thanks for your input and for catching my pronunciation error. I was pronouncing "ruin" like "rune". It was a southern thang. It is now edited and has an even better description of the process of mining.

Larry


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Larry
post Aug 8 22, 21:33
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Daniel, here is another one I wrote today for your perusal and perhaps amusement.

A GRIPE I HAVE IS – ANTI-EARTH WORK


Wrong Vessel


A
golden-
rule moment
I have when I
perceive how we waste
environments are a
instance of karma’s answer,
helping to show you that
avarice will match
value. Don’t throw
earth or go
in your
sink.


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post Aug 9 22, 02:27
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I promise not to go in my sink!!

chic ‘n’ livers

eat
hearty,
drink it in
and be merry;
you only live once…
but you can persevere
when you’re a moderator
on most TV game shows
while you’re a thinner
but broad grinner
and can stay
that way
long



© MLee Dickens’son



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Larry
post Aug 10 22, 11:58
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Daniel, I wrote this especially for you and what you are now going through. I do hope everything is successful and it will be an end to your unceasing pain. I am sure that your daily pain severely detracts from your ability to share your beautiful poetry with others and the surcease of what you face would be a blessing to us all.


AMPUTATION IS A – LEG UP ON NO PART



A TASTE OF PIECE

All
may be
providing
unguent to you
to help the pain stop
and it’s what you must do
to live your life without pain.
I pray for the day when
only thoughts go to
nerves, and that cup
includes a
sip for
art.


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post Aug 10 22, 16:11
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I'm so honored that you should write another of your fantastic double acrostic pieces just for me, Larry. I'm really quite moved. Thank you! deLighting in your ability and looking forward not be be distracted by pain and having to sit in the same spot most of the day, Daniel rollerskater.gif


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post Aug 10 22, 17:34
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Daniel,

I do hope you didn't mind the bad pun in the title "piece" for "peace". It was all I could come up with to imply that you were giving up a piece of yourself to obtain some peace for yourself. I am thrilled that you felt honored by my little bit of wordsmithing and my prayers will go with you through the coming days and also the recuperating process. As my sweet wife always said, we will keep a candle burning for you.


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post Aug 11 22, 09:57
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Yes, I did pick up on the very adept piece/piece usage... and I appreciate the candles too, my good friend!

piece
of leg
will support
the prosthetic
with which I'll soon walk
after weeks of rehab
during which I'll gain balance
to prevent my falling
kersplat on my face
or my tookis
disrupting
sense of
peace


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RECUPERATIONS – TYPE A LONG TOME


WADS WORTH


Rest
each day
cannot stop
use of your verse.
Penning plethora
ensures that when you fall,
ripped up papers will help to
allay pain or hurt when
they are cushioning.
It pillows butt
or face to
no harm
site


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post Aug 12 22, 20:27
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Now that is extremely creative, Larry, and of course in a double acrostic... but methinks in thie one you've lost the flow of sensible thought? Don't understand part of it, especially the closing! sLightly in the dark and running out of time for this evening, Daniel rollerskater.gif


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post Aug 13 22, 07:31
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Sorry Daniel, didn't mean to be so obtuse. Yes, it was a reach but I hope my explanation will clarify. To start, WADS WORTH denotes what numerous wads of paper would be worth in breaking possible falls. If there are enough of them, they will pile up around your desk to cushion and to keep your face or butt from hitting the floor. The ending, "no harm site" denotes the areas around your desk where falls may occur and which are covered by ripped up and wadded pieces of paper.
I know it is based on a cartoon picture in my mind where "foot-thick" piles of paper, "which you probably don't use", form cushions around the desk although you seem to be the type of person who makes sure everything goes in the trashcan and not on the floor. Like me, you type most, if not all your writing on the computer. I got the idea for this one from your last entry of going "kersplat" on your face or "tookis". Sorry about the confusion and hope the explanation doesn't detract too much from my efforts to amuse.
Larry with a mental condition!


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post Aug 13 22, 12:20
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mind-
bending
paper wads
pile around you
in case you slip off
your revolving desk chair
so keep penning and wadding
pieces that make no sense
in case something does
and you can type
new poem
for my
smile


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post Aug 14 22, 12:39
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SMILE THROUGH A... – PAINFUL ORDERS

PRAISE PHASE

Slurp
more tea
is what I
like before dawn.
Everything’s great if
there is no need for you
holding Eileen or the wall.
Real progress sees you go
on stairs, cross the floor,
using your bed...
God’s love gave
help for
aches!


Hope those aches go away soon.


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post Aug 15 22, 06:17
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My brain is currently to unfocused to take on a double acrostic, Larry! I'm amazed at yours.


candlin’ the win’d

flame
flickers
catching wind
of dark hearsay
his wick had been lit
before new gold holder
had embraced him, altaring
now tapering his plans
for upstanding life
to burn slowly
eloquent
to wax
out



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post Aug 15 22, 15:47
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WINDOWS OPENED – SEE YOUR FUTURE



PAIN’S PANES



What’s
inside
negates the
difficulty
of your choice to do
what is required so you
see clearly, as though a door
opened up by yourself
permits that new you
exit from hurt.
New milieu.
Ease. Your
Due!


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