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Posted by: Aug 23 03, 19:09

Hi Aphro:

Great poem.  I really loved the great words you chose for this piece.  Great Job.

Blessings always,
Your baby sister,
Shava

Posted by: Aphrodite Aug 15 03, 08:04

In utter cacophony,
her mind struggles between
rueful degradation
and reckless greed.

Cimmerian nights call
unrestrained lust,
exposing hours of unshielded
attachment leaving her haggard heart frigid.

Filthy paper souvenirs sustain
a damaged body as she spirals
loathsomely;
her shameful tears lull her to sleep.

Heartbreaking years accumulate;
her open door policy abruptly closes,
overexposed,
she dies untouched
by true love.

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Aug 15 03, 08:10

Wow Aphrodite!  :sun:  :lovie:  :dance:

This is truly a piece for our Garden here.

I find myself drawn into her lonely world with so few words. Your selection of words and images really captures her plea.

Nicely done and congrats for being the first post in this forum!  

You've added a tile to our Mosaic in style!

Cheers!  :pharoah2
Miss Cleo  :pharoah:

Posted by: Aphrodite Aug 15 03, 08:14

Hello Cleo~

Thanks, and it is my supreme pleasure to be the first to post in "The Garden of Eden."

Don't you love the avatar I picked? I do, thanks for such a wonderful selection. You make being her in the Mosaic, so much fun! A creative person's dream!!!!!!!!

Gutta go and check-out the leaves. (hee, hee)

Take care~
Lindi

Posted by: Zeus² Aug 15 03, 09:40

Lindi,
after reading this wonderful piece, a thought came to mind, a metaphor to be exact, "live by the sword, die by the sword".
A poignant write.
Like your new avatar too.
Z2.....Larry  :dance:

Posted by: Aphrodite Aug 15 03, 20:16

Hi Daddy~ (hee, hee)

Thanks, Zeus for stopping by to read and comment on this piece. I couldn't agree with you more, as far as your quote goes."Live by the sword, die by the sword".

Amen, my friend.

Your daughter in history~  

In love~
Aphrodite

Posted by: Eisa Aug 16 03, 17:08

Hi Aphrodite

How I loved reading this poignant poem of yours, filled with beautiful words and images.

   

I hope to read more, soon.

Eisa

Posted by: Aphrodite Aug 16 03, 18:31

Hello Eisa~

Thank you so much for your kind and positive comments.
I look forward to reading your work as well.

In love~  
Aphrodite

Posted by: Aphrodite Aug 25 03, 18:44

Hey Little Shava~

Thanks, so much for the nice words!
This is a sad and dark poem, but I like this one too.

Take care~
Lindi (Aphrodite)

Posted by: Brahms Aug 27 03, 21:25

Fully enjoyed reading, more so after reading the good people responding.  I have not experienced such constructive sharing
with people I enjoy relating with.  Translation:  very good to be here and all the better as I may join you all.

Thanks for all your whim,
Brahms

Posted by: Aphrodite Aug 28 03, 18:53

Hello Brahms and welcome to Mosaic Musings!
I appreciate you reading and commenting on my poem!

I look forward to reading your work, as your response to my poem is quite captivating! I imagine, so too, will your work be!

Take care~
PS Is your first name, Johannes, by chance????        

Take care~

Aphrodite (Lindi)

Posted by: Cathy Nov 11 04, 08:46

~sigh~

I wish I could write like that!

 :lovie:  :cloud9:

I'll have to check my vocabulary to see if it contains words like this

 :lovie:  :lovie:

Cathy

Posted by: Aphrodite Jan 22 05, 14:10

Hello Cathy~

Thank you so much for reading and commenting so nicely on my poem.
I apologize for being so remiss, as I didn't receive a tracker notification.
(probably because of time gone)

I appreciate your compliments very much!

Blessings~
Lindi

Posted by: Jox Jan 22 05, 14:17

Hi, Lindi - I've not seen this poem before... it must have been one of the very first postings on MM?

Anyway, as fresh now as then and this line...

"her open door policy abruptly closes"

Brilliant. I hate cliches but I do so appreciate it when cliches are turned in on themselves to create something new - this is an excellent example.

Glad this re-surfaced.

James.

Posted by: Aphrodite Jan 23 05, 15:35

Hello Jox~

It is awesome to interact with you again!

I appreciate your thoughtful comments and am glad that you enjoyed!

Take care and be well.

Lindi