Mother Goose's Real Deal Villanella Options

[JustDaniel]

Mother Goose’s Real Deal Villanella

You think this villanella bard’s up tight?
‘e seems to be a poet in a box?
Per’aps ‘is only drive’s to do it right?

Who knows what makes ‘im tick… or what’s ‘is plight?
Young Baby Bear was scarred by Goldilocks,
you think?  ‘is villainy:  ‘er, boards up tight...

to rock no more – and porridge-less – in fright!
…an’ piglet bard stays safe from wolf an’ fox;
per’aps ‘is only drive’s to do it right!

Miss Muff’s arachnophob'ia’s out o’ sight.
She banned the Kurds an’ bound ‘er whey with lox.
You think this villanella bard’s up tight!

Red Riding Hood gave clever wolf a fight;
per’aps both lusted granny’s antique woks?
Per’aps?… ‘tis only drive to do  it!  Right?

Poor ‘umpty Dumpty’s fall’s from such a height:
anthology of pomes ‘id in ‘is socks!
You think this villanella bard’s up tight!
Per’aps ‘is only drive’s to do it right.

© Daniel J Ricketts 16 Feb 2004

[JustDaniel]

Just in case y'all thought I might be writing something insidious, I added the date of composition.

offering Light verse, Daniel  :sun:

[Guest_Don_*]

His Just Daniel,

Perhaps line 6 scarred is meant to be scared?

Me thinks a proper read aloud would take some practice with contraction sounds.

Is the purpose of the contractions to nip the hard edges from formality?


Don

[JustDaniel]

Greetings, Don.  Glad to have you drop in on my little frolic here.  I just dug this out to spruce it up a bit... and possibly even add to it.  Thank you for your attention to this little detail:

Perhaps line 6 scarred is meant to be scared?

[ Actually 'scarred' is what I intended.  If you understand what I wrote further, I imagined the bear boarding her up, etc.  That would scar anyone, doncha think?  

Me thinks a proper read aloud would take some practice with contraction sounds.
 
[ Methinks thou art correct, alas. ]

Is the purpose of the contractions to nip the hard edges from formality?

[ Well, partly, I guess you could say that, but mainly I'm trying to give those two important repeated lines a bit more latitude to be played with.  I've taken lots of liberty.  I probably posted a better example of villanelle in Karnak.  Here, I'm just imagining the 'real story' behind nursery rhymes and playing with the form for fun. ]

Thank you for your visit, Don.
very Lightly, Daniel  

[Guest_Don_*]

God Morning Just Daniel,

It occured to me that you did intend scarred, but I didn't think our modern interpretation of the three bears wanted the little tike to be scarred.

Considering your profession, scarred fits.  Considering the macabre background and nature of fair-tales, "scarred" is tame.  Rock-a-bye baby if the bough should break...  

Good Heavens man!

Though I personnally tend to avoid contractions, your application is charming. My introduction to villanelle was of strict structure.  I loved the form and found it a challenge to master.  Much easier said than done.  I've written several, but none I felt mastered the form. I've seen so many modifications they seem natural.

Don

[Guest_Cathy_*]

I'm going to have to go to Karnak and look this up so I can
find out what it's all about.

Poor ‘umpty Dumpty’s fall’s from such a height:
anthology of pomes ‘id in ‘is socks!
You think this villanella bard’s up tight!
Per’aps ‘is only drive’s to do it right.
These are my favorite lines.  You do this so well.  I can
just see all those poems falling out of Humpty's socks. LOL

[Eisa]

Hi Daniel


This has really brought a smile to my lips tonight.

"pomes 'id in 'is socks" -- I love it !!

I think I'll raid 'is socks to get some ideas -- LOL!!


Snow

[JustDaniel]

Greetings again, Don!  

[size=3]It occured to me that you did intend scarred, but I didn't think our modern interpretation of the three bears wanted the little tike to be scarred. Considering your profession, scarred fits.  

[ Do you mean scarred from my profession? ] ???  

Considering the macabre background and nature of fairy-tales, "scarred" is tame.  Rock-a-bye baby if the bough should break...   Good Heavens man!

[ Yes, I always did wonder about that one. Singing it sounds so harmless and wonderful... 'till you hear that bough beginning to c.r.a.c.k ! ]

Though I personnally tend to avoid contractions, your application is charming.

[ Why, thank you, Don! ]

My introduction to villanelle was of strict structure.  I loved the form and found it a challenge to master.  Much easier said than done.  I've written several, but none I felt mastered the form. I've seen so many modifications they seem natural.

[ My introduction to the form was also to strict structure, but you know by now that I love to play with such.  Just for you, I've modified a more strictly structured piece that I playfully wrote around the time that I was taught the form and was passing on what I knew to another friend.  I removed her name to protect the innocent.

Here is a link to it in Karnak where I've just posted it for you:

Toying with a Villanelle ]

Lightly, Daniel  

[JustDaniel]

I'm going to have to go to Karnak and look this up so I can find out what it's all about.

[ Hmmm  I thought you'd already written one in Poetic Voices.  I'm gonna have to go back and check.  At any rate, I have no doubt that we'll be seeing yours soon.  I'm thankful for James' writing his, because it's stirred my juices again to play with the form some more. Glad you're gonna too! ]

Poor ‘umpty Dumpty’s fall’s from such a height:
anthology of pomes ‘id in ‘is socks!
You think this villanella bard’s up tight!
Per’aps ‘is only drive’s to do it right.

These are my favorite lines.  You do this so well.  I can
just see all those poems falling out of Humpty's socks. LOL

[ I'm glad that you like the imagery.  I wondered whether it was a bit too far-fetched! ] 

deLightingly, Daniel  

[JustDaniel]

Greetings, Snow!  

This has really brought a smile to my lips tonight.

Well, that brings one to mine this morning! ]

"pomes 'id in 'is socks" -- I love it !!

I think I'll raid 'is socks to get some ideas -- LOL!!

[ If the ideas that you get from it spark anything like your huitain, we're gonna be in for a treat, Snow! ]

anticipating more deLight, Daniel  

[Guest_Don_*]

Hi Just Daniel,

I can't say if you your occupation has scarred you, but I imagine many of your young patrons, patients, charges that are troubled are scarred.

Oh I remember writing a villanelle, Writing a Villanelle.  I must wait a few days before legally posting it here as I blew it with one posted on April 15, yesterday.

Returning I see you gave me a link for one at Karnak to chat about.
Going there now to see what is to be seen.

Don

[JustDaniel]

Just playin' about the scarring... but I've been scarred a bit too, actually.  It does happen in the profession.  

I will look forward to seeing your villanella.  They can be fun... and I do hope that you find mine in Karnak to be such!

deLightingly, Daniel  :sun:

[Guest_Don_*]

Just Daniel~~
Found it, copied it, went blind preparing answer, going there now to paste external file and double check teeny, tiny code omissions.

Don

[JustDaniel]

Thank you, Don!  deLightingly, Daniel  :sun: