Challenging a Scream Options

[JustDaniel]

Challenging a Scream

"You always were the quiet one;
why did you scream like that?"
Well, this is where I live, you see,
and freedom is a brat
in its own castle. Though a mouse,
sometimes at home I yell.
I hope you won't think less of me;
alone, I oft rebel.

Phrases incorporated: "Well, this is where I live," "Why did you scream like that?" and "You were always the quiet one."
Words utilized: freedom, mouse, castle

[Merlin]

So spake that "Wee, sleekit, cowrin, tim'rous beastie".

[Luce]

It has a very "Alice in Wonderland" type of feel. The type of crazy conversation you would have with a talking turtle you find screaming in his shell.

Nice.

Luce

P.S. Now of course I've got to go to the challenge board.

GOOD Grief!!! I didn't realize I was responding to an old post. Sorry for reviving it Daniel.

[RC James]

Daniel - I agree with Luce's Alice take, but I'm writing to you here because I can't seem to get a PM to you without including half the people on the site. It won't fire off unless I add "friends" and I don't want to do that, it's a personal message, I'd like to keep it that way. I was waiting for your second visit to critique Vestiges, that's all. Not ignoring you. I've done some work on meter and know you're quite sharp on that, so Yah, let's be pals, RC

[JustDaniel]

Hey, Richard...

Thanks for the visit and for your comment about how this piece feels to you. I appreciate that.

I also appreciate the clarification; that's very encouraging indeed.

To do a PM, you can either click REPLY to one sent to you OR click on the person's name and look for the option "send message" in the window. I'll send this in a PM so you can see it in the message itself.

deLighting in our journeys, Daniel