QUOTE (Peggy Carpenter Harwood @ Jul 19 07, 19:21 ) [snapback]99836[/snapback]
Hi,
I'm very new at free verse, so I'll just give my impression. Be sure to take it with a few grains of salt.
I personally like your poem very much, but I think correct punctuation would help it a great deal.
Keep writing.
Peggy
I agree with Peggy about punctuation -- it makes a poem look professional. I really like this. I'll be back with some suggestions later when I have more time.
Snow