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Feb 16 16, 23:53
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The Gate Though some discerning eyes perhaps would see fair woodland track where wayward feet had led; I, realizing in my reverie, had trodden where pale rainbows might have wed. Chimerical in mien, its sparkling hues regaled the eyes through lavender’s embrace from blooms piled on the path. They covered shoes and footprints left behind without a trace. Wisteria had crowned each ancient tree and gifted them with robes, now shimmering in errant sunbeams; golden panoply was heralding the pageantry of Spring but elderly, I comprehend my fate. The path I’d found led to a pearly gate. Words used: discerning, wayward, trodden, chimerical, sparkling, lavender, shimmering, spring, elderly
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Feb 17 16, 17:10
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Mosaic Master
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Feb 17 16, 20:51
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Hi Lori,
Thank You very much for your praise and obvious enjoyment. Thanks also for putting the picture at the top of the poem. I tried four or five times to link to the picture you had posted in the challenge but was unable to do so.
It was difficult to get all nine words in the poem with "elderly" being the most difficult because, even though I'm nearly 70, I do not feel elderly at all and hope I don't find myself striding up the path to the pearly gate any time soon.
Larry
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Mar 4 16, 02:32
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Ornate Oracle
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Hi Larry, I finally made it to Pandora's. And I'm so glad I'm here! As in all of your sonnets, you conjure up stunning, gentle images. And nearly always about nature. What an amazing gift you have...combining given words with your own astounding imagination. You leave me speechless.
Wisteria had crowned each ancient tree and gifted them with robes, now shimmering in errant sunbeams; golden panoply was heralding the pageantry of Spring
but elderly, I comprehend my fate. The path I’d found led to a pearly gate.
I love this unexpected ending, after the lovely stanza with wisteria, errant sunbeams, golden panoply and so on. Of course you have no intention of passing thru' the pearly gate. Much too soon! Just take a look at it, then return along the same wondrous path you've created.
Do keep on doing this challenge. I feel enticed to try my hand at it. But I would begin with FV, sorry! Syl
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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Mar 7 16, 19:11
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Hi Syl,
Glad you finally visited this little niche of the forums. I dearly love the challenges and shall continue trying my best to answer each one. FV is great when doing these because it gives one more freedom and is not nearly as difficult.
If someone wants to put up a challenge, I'll be glad to answer poetically or otherwise. Just let me know the parameters involved and I shall meet or exceed them to the best of my abilities. They are a wonderful goad to the old muse.
Larry
p.s. Don't want to see the pearly gates any time soon either.
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Jul 29 16, 01:54
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Ornate Oracle
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No, indeed, the pearly gates can remain metaphorical, as far as I'm concerned!!
Hey, you've given me an idea for the next challenge.
Take care, Syl QUOTE (Larry @ Mar 7 16, 21:11 ) Hi Syl,
Glad you finally visited this little niche of the forums. I dearly love the challenges and shall continue trying my best to answer each one. FV is great when doing these because it gives one more freedom and is not nearly as difficult.
If someone wants to put up a challenge, I'll be glad to answer poetically or otherwise. Just let me know the parameters involved and I shall meet or exceed them to the best of my abilities. They are a wonderful goad to the old muse.
Larry
p.s. Don't want to see the pearly gates any time soon either.
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Mis temas favoritos The Lord replied, my precious, precious child, I love you and I would never leave you. During your times of trial and suffering, when you see only one set of footprints, it was then that I carried you.
"There is no life higher than the grasstops Or the hearts of sheep, and the wind Pours by like destiny, bending Everything in one direction."
Sylvia Plath, Crossing the Water, Wuthering Heights. Nominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here!MM Award Winner
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