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 Creative Chieftain  Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox  |
 Second Edit: Seasonal Tapestry Autumn lies scattered on the ground. Winter sheds her frigid gown. Spring blooms with blessings of colour. Summer warms with salutary sunshine. First Edit: Seasonal Tapestry Autumn lies scattered on the ground. Winter sheds her white, frigid gown. Spring blooms with blessings of colour. Summer warms with salutary sunshine.  Original Posting: Seasonal Tapestry Autumn lay scattered on the ground. Winter shed her white gown. Spring bloomed with blessings of colour. Summer warmed with salutary sunshine. PP ·······  ······· |
  
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Feb 23 06, 13:51
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Creative Chieftain Posts: 1,621 Joined: 18-August 05 From: Johannesburg, South Africa Member No.: 127 Real Name: Beverleigh Gail Annegarn Writer of: Poetry & Prose Referred By:Jox |
QUOTE(Jox @ Feb. 23 2006, 18:46) Well done, Bev. A frigid strip-tease - now there's a strange thought. Must be working at one of those seasonal clubs the Laps have up there. J. James! I knew it would appeal to the male-mind! - one of those clubs where 'you can't touch' the wares!  As you can see by Kenneth's comments and my response. I may change it and take out the white and just leave the frigid!? I'll think about it some more... PP  ······· ······· |
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Peterpan Seasonal Tapestry Feb 23 06, 07:27 
Nina Hi Bev
Interesting - a very minimalist look at th... Feb 23 06, 07:37 Peterpan QUOTE(Nina @ Feb. 23 2006, 13:37)Hi Bev
Inte... Feb 23 06, 07:40 Jox Hi Bev,
Well done.
Yes, my thought was - as I se... Feb 23 06, 08:17 Peterpan QUOTE(Jox @ Feb. 23 2006, 14:17)Hi Bev,
Well... Feb 23 06, 08:31 Cathy Hi pp,
Pleasant view of the seasons ... :su... Feb 23 06, 09:34 Peterpan Thank you Cathy!
Thanks for the advice!
... Feb 23 06, 09:45 Peterpan Hello!
Edited my poem! Grateful thanks fo... Feb 23 06, 12:32 Jox Well done, Bev.
A frigid strip-tease - now there... Feb 23 06, 12:46 Cyn your rewrite works very well. I like this!
Cyn Feb 23 06, 13:29 manofwords73 Hi Bev,
I have to say I liked the first version fo... Feb 23 06, 13:32 Peterpan QUOTE(manofwords73 @ Feb. 23 2006, 19:32)Hi B... Feb 23 06, 13:44 Peterpan QUOTE(Cyn @ Feb. 23 2006, 19:29)your rewrite ... Feb 23 06, 13:48 Peterpan Hello!
I am female! I changed my mind... Feb 23 06, 13:59 Nina Hi Bev
I'm not sure "Winter sheds her frigid ... Feb 23 06, 14:05 Peterpan Hello Nina!
Thanks for the input. I will thin... Feb 23 06, 14:09 Cyn well if you want more 2 cents, what are you up to ... Feb 23 06, 14:12 Peterpan :)
Thanks Cyn! Feb 23 06, 14:13 Cathy Hi pp,
It seems as though you are doing a one-lin... Feb 24 06, 11:45 
Peterpan Perhaps you have a point! Cathy.
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