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Musical Seduction   (revised)

Crystal-pure notes,
filtered on zephyrs,
swirl through
sun-dappled trees.

Mesmerising melody
entices me, unresisting,
into forest’s secret glade.

Tendrils of harmony
coil around my being;
draw me into your arms;
weave a shared destiny.

As music spins enchantment,
we spiral upwards:
an inter-twined,
shimmering presence,
whirling into infinity.




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Musical Seduction (original)

Crystal-pure notes,
carried on the breeze,
swirl through
sun-dappled trees.

Mesmerising melody
entices me, unresisting,
into forest’s secret glade.

Tendrils of harmony
coil around my being;
draw me into your arms;
weave a shared destiny.

As music spins enchantment,
we spiral upwards:
an inter-twined,
shimmering presence,
whirling into infinity.

© Nina  2006

Nina

[Guest_Nina_*]

Hi J

>J>carried on the breeze, (Cliche - and rhymes with "trees")

Is it?  Ok will change it.  Hadn't noticed the rhyme

>J>Nina, this is a very romantic piece which uses clever woodland metaphores - it reminds me that Shakespeare set romances in forests.

Thanks.  I hadn't thought about Shakespeare's romances in forests but you're right he did that in Midsummer Night's Dream. I wanted to capture a dreamy magical feeling in the woodland.

>J>I could pick almost any line for singling-out as very well written etc - but have highlighted just a few.

thanks muchly.

>J>A most enjoyable read, thank you.

I'm chuffed you enjoyed it so.

Thanks for reading and commenting.

Nina