Taken by the Sea, Wizard & Faery Award Winner Options

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Taken by the Sea

Walking along the seashore,
my footsteps make
light impressions
in wet sand.
Behind me,
turning tide erases all traces.

Cool breeze brushes my face;
ruffles curling strands of hair.
Gossamer garments cling,
accentuating body contours.

You’re waiting:
a distant figure,
riding white horses,
cresting waves.

I move towards you:
seduced into deeper water
by unseen currents.

Time slows;
I feel you near.

© Nina 2006

Nina

[Guest_Nina_*]

Hi Kenneth

>K>Haunting work.

Thank you.  I'm chuffed you think it haunting.

>K>You leave a lot to the reader in the way of interpreting what exactly happens to the speaker. Most times this doesn't strengthen a poem as the effect leaves readers feeling confused. But because you set up a very strong emotion, one that gives me chills, I find myself worrying about the narrator. What happens next? I'm left to hope for the best while at the same time knowing things turn out tragic. Thus my imagination is piqued.

I'm glad it didn't feel that leaving much to interpretation didn't weaken the poem and that you felt a lot of empathy and caring for the narrator.  Yes it does turn out tragically.

>K>This poem rewards readers with the chance to extend the story long after the last line. Not all poets offer that to an audience. It's always refreshing to find a piece that allows one to flex his or her imagination.

Thank you.  I quite like to leave the reader with questions and to let them decide which way they want the story to go.

Thanks very much for your comments.

Nina