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Taken by the Sea

Walking along the seashore,
my footsteps make
light impressions
in wet sand.
Behind me,
turning tide erases all traces.

Cool breeze brushes my face;
ruffles curling strands of hair.
Gossamer garments cling,
accentuating body contours.

You’re waiting:
a distant figure,
riding white horses,
cresting waves.

I move towards you:
seduced into deeper water
by unseen currents.

Time slows;
I feel you near.

© Nina 2006

Nina

[Guest_Nina_*]

Hi Cathy

>C>I love the title!  This could be interpreted in different ways and yet your title doesn't exactly give it away.  

Thank you very much.  I wanted the title and the poem to be interpreted in different ways and I didn't want to influence readers with the interpretation I had in mind.

>C>I see it as someone who is grieving over a lost love and she sees him waiting for her in the waves.

Yes that is one of the interpretations :)

>C>turning tide erases all traces. Nice internal rhyme!

thanks, though it was totally accidental and I hadn't even noticed, till you mentioned it.

Cool breeze brushes my face;
ruffles curling strands of hair.
Gossamer garments cling,
accentuating body contours. Good imagery!

thank you.

You’re waiting:
a distant figure,
riding white horses,  Should this be 'horse' - singular?
cresting waves.

no, it should be plural.  Again dual meaning.  White horses are a type of wave so I imagined that and also the distant figure in the middle of a pack of white horses, sitting on one but holding the reins of all of them.

Time slows;
I feel you near. Death is close?

yes that is one of the interpretations I intended. :)

>C>Very well done Nina!

thank you very much

thanks also for your comments

Nina