Taken by the Sea, Wizard & Faery Award Winner Options

[Guest_Nina_*]

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Taken by the Sea

Walking along the seashore,
my footsteps make
light impressions
in wet sand.
Behind me,
turning tide erases all traces.

Cool breeze brushes my face;
ruffles curling strands of hair.
Gossamer garments cling,
accentuating body contours.

You’re waiting:
a distant figure,
riding white horses,
cresting waves.

I move towards you:
seduced into deeper water
by unseen currents.

Time slows;
I feel you near.

© Nina 2006

Nina

[Guest_Jox_*]

Hi Nina,

Fantastic! I love this.

There are many interpretations available - accident; trance; drug-influenced (actual or imagined) and so on. But the point is that your words suit all these beautifully.

I have only one possible glitch - and even it is perfectly fine if left:

Behind me, (I wonder if you need this line?)

The title is very clever, also by the way. Taken as killed, moved away, distracted, seduced, influenced etc etc.

I hope others ignore my comments and still offer whatever crits they wish - this is purely my perspective and others may disagree. However...

I seldom, if ever, dislike any of your poems - and many I like a very great deal. But even so, I think this is one of your best.

Thank you so much for the read (and I shall re-read several times). Much enjoyed, thanks.

J.