Destination Options

[Guest_Nina_*]

Destination

I ride forwards
on yesterday’s winds,
propelled into uncertainty
by life’s variable currents.

Perpetual movement
fragments action
into a shower
of fading memories.

Forgotten dreams
echo in shadowy space:
dust particles
blown beyond reach
by turbulent winds.

I travel onwards to tomorrow;
time slipping speedily
through spanned fingers
as I close the distance
on my destination.

One last breath gasped
before oblivion.

       ~

copyright Nina 2005

Nina

[Guest_Toumai_*]

Hi Nina

Ah well, we'll all get there some day ...

I ride forwards
on yesterday’s winds,  --- nice use of yesterday/forwards
propelled into uncertainty  --- soooo true!
by life’s variable currents.  --- sounds like a bit of chaos theory there :)

Perpetual movement
fragments action
into a shower
of fading memories.  --- interesting image; very original

Forgotten dreams
echo in shadowy space:  --- yep, that's my mind
dust particles
blown beyond reach
by turbulent winds.  --- another nice image of us grasping around for something we once looked for

I travel onwards to tomorrow;
time slipping speedily
through spanned fingers  --- scary stuff; brill
as I close the distance
on my destination.

One last breath gasped
before oblivion.   --- so make the most of the journey?

Original and powerful take on the idea, thanks.

One tiny nit: you use "winds" in S1 L2 and again S3 L5 (you could maybe change the 2nd to simply turbulence?)

Fran