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Jun 14 05, 10:11
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*Graphic provided by Celtic Castle DesignsStones (revised - thanks Alan, James and Fran)
As I walk towards you a stone catches my gaze. Picking it up, I feel its presence weighting in my hand. Silken surface, polished smooth by weathering through time. Dark, ebony hues give hint of inner mystery. Tiny imperfections enhance character.
Lonely silence, broken only by distant hum of motorway traffic, accompanies my steps.
I move onward; passing so many rows of scrubbed white stones, stretching so far in geometric arrangement.
Finally, I reach you.
I place warm stone, on cold, hard rim of upright marble. My tears fall freely
A trace of me lies with you. Notes: In Jewish cemeteries no one brings flowers to put on graves. Instead it is traditional to place a small stone on the headstone to signify that you have visited. This tradition probably goes back to the time before headstones were commonplace when piles of stones were used to mark the location of a grave.
Motorway: The British word for freeway.----------------------- Stones (original)
As I walk towards you, a stone catches my gaze. Picking it up, I feel its presence weighing in my hand. Silken surface, polished smooth by weathering through time. Dark, ebony hue gives hint of inner mystery. Tiny imperfections, enhance character.
Lonely silence, broken only by distant hum of motorway traffic, accompanies my steps. I move onward; passing row upon row of scrubbed white stones, which stretch for miles in geometric arrangement.
Finally I reach you.
Tears fall freely as I place warm stone, on cold, hard rim of upright marble.
A trace of me now marks the place where you lie in earth below. Notes: In Jewish cemeteries no one brings flowers to put on graves. Instead it is traditional to place a small stone on the headstone to signify that you have visited. This tradition probably goes back to the time before headstones were commonplace when piles of stones were used to mark the location of a grave.Nina
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Guest_Nina_*
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Jun 14 05, 17:17
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Hi Alan
A trace of me rests within you
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or with you ....
mmm, not within you, but maybe with you.
thanks
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Nina Stones Jun 14 05, 10:11 Dear Nina,
Quite touching. Didn't know about ... Jun 14 05, 10:37 Jox Hi Nina - I didn't know about the stones - tha... Jun 14 05, 11:17 Nina Hi Alan
Thanks for your suggestions
As I walk to... Jun 14 05, 11:32 Nina Hi James
A few suggestions.
thank you, much appre... Jun 14 05, 11:36 Jox Hi Nina - yes I saw Alan's comments after I le... Jun 14 05, 11:43 Nina Hi James
No I don't think the poem would be b... Jun 14 05, 12:09 Dear Nina,
Re motorway - do use some form of road... Jun 14 05, 12:25 Jox Hi Nina, a few ideas to play with - though I still... Jun 14 05, 12:49 Nina Hi Alan
I prefer to leave motorway in and add an ... Jun 14 05, 13:00 Nina Hi James
Thanks for all your suggestion for the l... Jun 14 05, 13:02 Toumai Hi Nina,
Your poem is deeply moving regarding vis... Jun 14 05, 13:33 Nina Hi Fran
Thanks for your comments they are much ap... Jun 14 05, 14:29 Toumai I think that's the way I see them, Nina; even ... Jun 14 05, 14:43 Nina Hi James, Alan
would this wording work better for... Jun 14 05, 14:51 Toumai Stick with that view, Nina - that's what 15 ye... Jun 14 05, 15:06 Jox Hi Nina,
Well, it's entirely your choice but ... Jun 14 05, 15:50 Nina Hi James
OK I'll consign that one to the recy... Jun 14 05, 15:58 Jox Sorry Nina - but I'm sure it's worth it.
... Jun 14 05, 16:11 Nina Hi James
no problem and no need to apologise
... Jun 14 05, 16:34 Dear Nina,
Not bad.
How about
A trace of me
re... Jun 14 05, 17:02 Jox Hi Nina,
My trace...with you
any use?
(rests is... Jun 14 05, 17:28 Nina Hi James, Alan
other words that come to mind inst... Jun 15 05, 01:25 Nina I've made some revisions now. Please tel... Jun 16 05, 16:25 Jox Hi Nina,
Yes, I do believe that the final verse n... Jun 16 05, 16:51 Nina Hi James
thank you, much appreciated. I... Jun 16 05, 17:08 Cleo_Serapis Congrats Nina on your wizard award winning tile!
... Aug 19 06, 10:54 Cathy lol... We've got to stop meeting like this... Aug 19 06, 14:44 Eisa Well done again Nina! You have certainly writt... Aug 19 06, 16:58
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