junior guests present their work, my kids' poems from a workshop Options

[Guest_Toumai_*]

Hi, everyone

My kids went to a poetry workshop recently and had a fabulous time, hearing poetry, writing their own and making huge pictures (on the back of an old roll of wallpaper) to illustrate one. The event was to raise money for 'Children of Chernobyl'. They came home and asked if their work could be put on the web (since mum spends so much time there) ...


Tornado, by Jason (age 8): a shape poem


  Tornados can go at
        about 1200 miles
                per hour. They
                      surround
                       hurricanes
                      or tidal
                    waves.
              Tornados
            a r e
             swirling
               vortices
                 of wind.
                         They
                             can
                                suck
                                 u p
                               things
                           up to
                         as big
                      as a
                  church.
                     They
                       are very
                               deva-
                                     stating
                                          and can
                                          destroy
                                    whole
                                 forests
                           at a time.





My Guinea Pigs  
by Elizabeth (age 6): a prose poem

Our guinea pigs squeak when they are hungry.
When dad squeaks he frightens them.
They eat hay, salad, apple, carrot, grass, dandelion and guinea pig food.

[Guest_Nina_*]

Hi Fran

what a wonderful idea and I hope it has has inspired your children to copy their mum and write more poetry.

Hi Jason

I really like your Tornado shape poem.  It is very clever as well as being most interesting.  I learnt stuff about tornadoes that I didn't know before.  Like James I am very impressed that you know the word vortices.  It shows that you really do know what you are writing about.  I hope you persuade your Mum to post some more of your work.

Do you like reading poem stories?  I know a very good one that you should get your Mum to borrow from the library.  It is called Cloud Busting by Malorie Blackman and I think you will enjoy it.

Hi Elizabeth

You have also written a very good poem.  Your Daddy must have a very loud squeak if  he scaresthe guinea pigs.  James has given you some very good suggestions for your poem.  

I hope you write some more for us to see as I have really enjoyed reading this and if you do as James suggests perhaps your Mum can show us what it looks like with pictures and in colour.

Nina