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faux-ku, titled haiku/senryu w/word play [ Daniel's 'creation' ] |
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Jul 20 04, 14:11
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 19,130
Joined: 2-August 03
From: Southwest New Jersey, USA
Member No.: 6
Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr.
Writer of: Poetry
Referred By:Lori
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Faux-ku is my own brain child, developed over a long time of playing with haiku and senryu. My Light, so to speak, dabbles in wit, and hopefully it has its place in haiku/senryu-type poetry. This form can have seriousness, but it will always be dressed in Light clothing. (Just remember, these threads are for us to PRACTICE in! Let NO ONE suppose that I'm here to be a teacher. I AIN'T! But practicing in short forms, I believe, can improve one's ability in other forms, including Haiku. However, I AM the expert in faux-ku merely because it is my own baby! I'm willing to engage a tutor to bring it to maturity, if one is here and available to me. The absolute criteria for faux-ku:
1) a fetching title [ haiku and senryu never have a title ]
( title must be or have a play on words )
2) haiku/senryu form [ two snapshots ]
[ 5-7-5 syllables... or 3-2-3 beats -- OR LESS ! ]
one snapshot in two lines
another snapshot in one line
or vice versa
3) word-play in each snapshot (as well as in title) Initial Samples: high coopfoxy but chicken – red hens turned into roosters often high in trees © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002out to launchthree nautical girls -- malled by low-price salers during their noon break © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 loud warningred sails in sunset clash crewedly once a blue moon; mutin’ ears marooned © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 stocking up downwhite sales for son sets precedent: Martha Stewart fitted stock preferred © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 dark fearsscared by Dad's visits? at bottom had you been switched to a light sleeper? © Daniel J Ricketts 08 Dec 2002 sub lime piecesyou've run out? blimey! just cut up with ripe lemons to post on our glass © Daniel J Ricketts 10 Dec 2002 Now it's YOUR turn!DeLightingly, Daniel 8)
P.S. One other concern... We reserve the responsibility to throw Sue out for several days at a time if she shows signs of addiction!
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Mar 12 13, 13:35
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Group: Gold Member
Posts: 19,130
Joined: 2-August 03
From: Southwest New Jersey, USA
Member No.: 6
Real Name: Daniel J Ricketts, Sr.
Writer of: Poetry
Referred By:Lori
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still underground
dispensed in gNawlins: masticated swamp root-tea'n' disc-tilled with cayenne
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JustDaniel faux-ku Jul 20 04, 14:11 JustDaniel blown aweigh in Bill-lows
president got cot
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throughout ... Feb 4 05, 06:25 JustDaniel Here's the one I promised James with a bit o... Feb 4 05, 10:45 Jox LOL Daniel - thank you very much!
And all the... Feb 4 05, 11:11 JustDaniel Thank you James... and for the ku-dos suggestion ... Feb 4 05, 11:45 Toumai Hi Daniel,
You're the king of the faux-ku, bu... Feb 4 05, 12:39 JustDaniel QUOTE (Toumai @ Feb. 04 2005, 12:39)Hi Daniel... Feb 4 05, 13:59 Jox Hi Daniel... Can put an announcement about a conte... Feb 4 05, 14:05 JustDaniel Hey, James...
I'll personally judge the conte... Feb 4 05, 14:44 Cleo_Serapis Hi Daniel.
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if you’d write a wrong
do... Mar 29 05, 11:44 JustDaniel milk weed ?
what made cow wander
in from her ver... Jun 28 05, 13:49 Toumai Hi Daniel,
What made cow wonder -
smoking gra... Jun 28 05, 14:50 JustDaniel Now how in the world did I miss that, Fran!?
... Sep 4 05, 05:44 Toumai Hi Daniel, good to see you :wave:
I'd ... Sep 4 05, 06:32 JustDaniel While you're thinking of a title, Fran, here... Sep 4 05, 14:36 JustDaniel heavy wait
ticked off, thanks given
hands enci... Nov 29 05, 11:07 Toumai Hi Daniel
Clocking in again, lol? Good to see you... Nov 29 05, 15:00 Cybele Hi Daniel,
Welcome back. Good to see you postin... Nov 30 05, 06:56 circumsolar hey, these are such fun to read! all that seri... Nov 30 05, 09:05 circumsolar what a boor
the man's such a pig --
displays ... Nov 30 05, 11:35 circumsolar oh dear oh dear oh dear
stags, hot 'n' ho... Nov 30 05, 11:39 JustDaniel cot cold-handed
he's so licit...Ted
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ta... May 6 06, 14:28 ohsteve Tears Away
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Smoke gets in, your... May 7 06, 07:41 ohsteve costly smells
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odorus concoc... May 7 06, 07:44 galoutofdixie A form invented (and perfected?) by Daniel....this... Jun 2 06, 19:39 Toumai Daniel started a fabulous idea here. I'd compl... Jun 3 06, 02:01 JustDaniel Hey, y'all...
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has p... Sep 8 14, 13:52 JustDaniel B R A V O Sep 8 14, 14:36 Larry Hi Daniel,
Thank you, glad you enjoyed.
Larry Sep 10 14, 16:33 Alan REGRETS
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