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 Babylonian  Posts: 87 Joined: 27-November 06 Member No.: 361 Real Name: Ross Baird Writer of: Poetry Referred By:Mysty  |
Epitaph It all went so fast: I should have looked more; I should have listened, and, perhaps, sometimes felt more before now. ace |
  
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Aug 5 09, 11:57
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 Assyrian Posts: 174 Joined: 27-May 07 From: Indiana, USA Member No.: 439 Real Name: Dee Stotts Writer of: Poetry |
I like it. Simple. True.
Just a couple suggestions... I would leave out "sometimes". You really don't need it and it loses power (I think). Also, the ending is somewhat redundant, since you suggest "before now" with the "should have". Perhaps an ending of... I should have. Just my two cents. Enjoyed. |
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ace Epitath Aug 4 09, 17:59 
ace Dee:
Thanks for the read and the suggestions. ... Aug 5 09, 17:11 
Psyche Hi Ace!
My 2 cents... to toss or take! I l... Aug 6 09, 00:21 ace Syl:
Thank you so very much; wish I could hav... Aug 6 09, 13:54 Arnfinn G'day, Ross
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It all went so fast:
I... Aug 7 09, 02:21 Eisa Hi Ace
I like the message in this one and there i... Aug 7 09, 17:37 Peggy Carpenter Harwood Hi Ace,
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