Thanks for your comments guys. This poem's been a real juggling act for me. I desperately want to keep all punctuation out of it for several reasons but I also don't want to alienate readers. I don't know if you guys picked up on the significance of the title but that was meant as a kind of key to help unlock some of the imagery. It might only work for Australian readers though. It's the date that the recent bushfires were finally brought under control.
Leo, you're quite right with your critique. Do you have any suggestions as to how I might leave extra signposts without bringing in punctuation?
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