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post Nov 27 07, 13:33
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If only words would grow on vines,
I'd serve them up along these lines;
taste the crop that came to flower
and dine on prose from hour to hour.
Partake of leaves.
Partake of root.
I'd save the best
for last...
the fruit.


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The seed of an idea as small as sand.
I want to grow at the end of my hand;
as if my arm were free to flower
some great prose hour to hour;
my fingers no more than a wonderland.

I place my hand to this clean page
and wait for it to behave a sage;
believing that it has some power,
until my fingers freeze, then cower;
proving themselves a dumb appendage.

That in my hand some phrase take root;
that it alone would bear the fruit,
not make of me some undergoer,
where perfect words to mind come slower;
then gladly would I be it`s prostitute.
 
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post Mar 25 08, 06:03
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Thanks Cleo.

Done and done.
 
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- Xanadu   A CONSTANT GARDENER [revised 25 Mar 08]   Nov 27 07, 13:33
- - Nada Lott   H'lo Linda, pleased to meet you. Your poem ...   Nov 27 07, 15:38
- - Xanadu   I have been writing for a good long time. I have o...   Nov 27 07, 16:05
- - Nada Lott   Ok then, later. First thing I'd address would...   Nov 27 07, 16:35
- - Xanadu   This poetry gig is still a little new to me. I am ...   Nov 27 07, 17:53
- - heartsong7   Hi Linda... I like the premise and the delivery sh...   Nov 27 07, 18:18
- - Xanadu   Thank you so much!!! As I mentioned be...   Nov 27 07, 20:03
- - MFK Buckley   Hello, do we call you Xanadu? You are currently ...   Nov 27 07, 20:45
- - Xanadu   Thank you dear. I am looking forward to much enlig...   Nov 27 07, 20:51
- - MFK Buckley   Perhaps we could see this through revisions first....   Nov 27 07, 20:59
- - Nada Lott   QUOTE Some reviews mention terms I am not familiar...   Nov 27 07, 21:01
- - Xanadu   Let me work on this for a couple of days. My first...   Nov 27 07, 21:05
- - Don   Dear X, Pleased to meet you and especially as a p...   Nov 28 07, 09:08
- - Xanadu   Well, this is what happened. After I completed the...   Nov 28 07, 11:41
- - Don   Hi X, Although my recent work has not been, I pre...   Nov 28 07, 12:08
- - Xanadu   I am working very hard to improve. Very hard!...   Nov 28 07, 14:53
- - heartsong7   A CONSTANT GARDENER If words would only grow on v...   Nov 28 07, 15:00
- - Xanadu   Phew!!! Thank you, thank you. I was no...   Nov 28 07, 15:05
- - Don   A CONSTANT GARDENER If words would only grow on v...   Nov 28 07, 15:18
- - Xanadu   Okey dokey! Sometimes I just get so confused. ...   Nov 28 07, 16:07
- - heartsong7   I think it would be fine to post it above the orig...   Nov 28 07, 17:20
- - Don   The idea is identification so each version/revisio...   Nov 28 07, 17:55
- - Nada Lott   Yes! No time now to say more, but I nominate ...   Nov 29 07, 08:47
- - Xanadu   Better? Thank you so much for the nomination. I do...   Nov 29 07, 12:47
- - MFK Buckley   Your premise is concisely and precisely expressed ...   Nov 29 07, 20:51
- - Cleo_Serapis   Hi Linda, :cook: I enjoy you tightened revision a...   Nov 30 07, 06:40
- - Xanadu   Thank you for suggestions Cleo. I am going to have...   Nov 30 07, 12:39
- - heartsong7   Linda, QUOTE I understand the repeating words is k...   Nov 30 07, 12:56
- - Xanadu   Thanks again! It was kind of what I was thinki...   Nov 30 07, 13:22
- - Nada Lott   QUOTE I understand the repeating words is kind of ...   Nov 30 07, 17:45
- - Xanadu   Thank you so much Nada. I have been slammed for re...   Nov 30 07, 20:16
- - Cleo_Serapis   That's so unfortunate Linda. I've had my ...   Dec 1 07, 07:58
- - Xanadu   Thank you for the feedback Cleo. I can take a roug...   Dec 1 07, 10:46
- - Cleo_Serapis   Congrats Linda on your wizard award winning tile...   Mar 16 08, 08:52
- - Xanadu   Thank you so much for your support.   Mar 16 08, 11:53
- - jgdittier   Dear Xanadu and All, This was a most, most rewardi...   Mar 24 08, 16:21
- - Cleo_Serapis   Hi Linda, One more suggestion for the sentence be...   Mar 25 08, 05:49
- - Xanadu   Thanks Cleo. Done and done.   Mar 25 08, 06:03

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