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Mosaic Musings...interactive poetry reviews _ Poetry Exhibition -> Plato's Pearls of Wisdom _ Control

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Jul 27 13, 08:15

From the Logarhyme "poetic forms practice" thread in Karnak Crossing http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=2767:

Control

The time has come, it's true, I'll need
to take control, and then proceed
to write a post
that fits the bill and pleases me.
It takes some thought, but soon I see
past writer's ghost

(which tortures me). I strive to reach
coherent rhymes, and not beseech
the ones who ask
for clarity. Apologize?
I've tried and then technologized
the bloody task.

It seems in this chaotic world
where change is slow: my muse was hurled
without a net--
mind's eye quicksand. Soon comes reprieve:
I break the trap, grin and retrieve
game, match and set.

Copyright © Lorraine M Kanter 27 July 2013

Posted by: Eisa Aug 7 13, 17:29

Hi Lori

Just noticed this one - first in this forum for 2013. Hooray!

I love the logarhyme form - one of my favourites. I like the topic here too, since my muse isn't working too well these days.

I do like your use of enjambment, which always keeps R&M more interesting imo.

Snow

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Aug 8 13, 04:43

Hi Snow,

Yup - first posting since reopening this forum. Please DO join in!

Larry is challenging me in that thread in Karnak to respond and I owe him two at this writing, ! They are fun - and I find it easier to follow his end line words to help get me going.

Glad you enjoyed! See you there and here?

Cheers,
~Cleo

Posted by: Maggie Aug 27 13, 20:45

Hi Cleo,

I like it!!!

I haven't written a poem in a pretty long time too. I ought to do that too!

Peggy

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Aug 28 13, 08:28

Hi there Peggy,

Thanks for stopping in! YES, please DO! Now that the non-crit is open again perhaps you can start here?

Cheers,
~Cleo

Posted by: Keith Logan Oct 2 13, 03:43

Hi Lori,

What's not to like?
A snappy logarhyme AND a poem about poetry and that contrary muse.
I love it.

Keith, the happy chappy

Posted by: Cleo_Serapis Oct 3 13, 06:31

Gee thanks Keith!

We have a 'fun' thread going over in Karnak (at the think above) where I try to use the same end words from what Larry writes. Check it out!

Cheers,
~Cleo