Man from Bolling (Revision)
There once was an old man from Bolling
who loved to go down the street strolling.
With his purse in hand
and a fandango fan,
he set all his neighbors' eyes rolling.
Peggy Carpenter Harwood
Man from Bolling
There once was an old man from Bolling
who loved to go down the street strolling.
He had lipstick in hand
and a fandango fan.
All who saw him felt their eyes rolling.
Peggy Carpenter Harwood
Too funny Peggy!
My only issue is your closing line. While one can certainly feel their eyes rolling, would one say it? I suggest a re-work of that line - perhaps incorporating 'audience' or 'crowd' in there instead? I would think they couldn't resist rolling their eyes, more so than feeling them roll.
Cheers
~Cleo
Hi Cleo,
Thanks for the excellent idea!! Is it any better now or would "sent" be better than "set"?
Peggy
Much better Peggy!
YAY for you!
~Cleo
Hey Peggy,
I think I knew a guy like that once. Very weird dude!
Here is another last line you might ponder: "Those watching now needed consoling"
Larry
Hi Larry,
Thank you for reading, commenting and suggesting an alternate last line!! Ha!! Ha!! I really like your line, but do think I'll keep the one I've got.
Great to run into you on the boards!!!
Peggy
Very entertaining!
There's a man who strolls around my neighborhood in dresses and combat boots.
Life is interesting.
A great read for me.
Merle
Hi merle,
Thanks for reading!!! This world certainly has some funny characters in it, doesn't it?
Ha!!!
Peggy
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