Decommissioned (Revision 1)
A mosquito out searching for blood
spied a farm's prize thoroughbred stud.
She bit him in a place
that was a disgrace.
Henceforth he was just known as "Dud."
Peggy Carpenter Harwood
Decommissioned
A mosquito out searching for blood
spied a farm's prize thoroughbred stud.
She bit him in a place
that was a disgrace.
Henceforth he was simply known as "Dud."
Peggy Carpenter Harwood
Peggy:
I've meant to tell you I enjoyed this for several days, but have had log in problems. I an a limerick fan, although I haven't written many.
One thought...would the last line be better rhythmicall as...
Henceforth he was just known as "Dud:.
Eliminates one syllable.
ace
Hi Ace,
Thanks so much for reading!! I'm so glad you enjoyed!!! I do think "just" sounds better than "simply." I'll try it.
Peggy
Peggy, I have read this several times, laughed, chuckled, cringed, thought ouch...'bloodsucking mosquitoes.' And then wow what terrible place did that thing bite.... lol.
Steve
Hi Steve,
Ha!! Glad you read!!! Thanks for the encouraging words!!
Peggy
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