Listen!

Hear it! The wind is calling us,
let’s leave this gloomy cell,
to roam vast fields and pick
bouquets of sunshine in the dell.

Yes, listen! Let green grass and trees
command those flowers speak.
The call of deer, the chirp of birds
revive us when we're bleak.

Refrains of rains and swirling sea
console our heated mind.
These gifts of heaven, ours for free;
let's thank Him who is kind.

So don't allow your ears be closed
against the splendor’s sighs
and never let your heart be blind
to modest orphans' cries.

Agatha Lai

Aha ! I have done some editing and nobody
knows any difference.




Aggiel

Oops!

I'v been commenting on your version in Herme's Aggie myself.

I like this poem very much - especially your opening - it commands attention:
Hear it ! The wind is calling us.

Your inner rhymes and alliteration sing as well throughout!

It's good to be reminded of these 'free gifts' of Nature, of His caring - especially now that Easter is almost here (for those who celebrate it). Happy Spring Aggie!

When you have a moment, can you comment on your nomination thread at the link below. I've sent you a Permission form that needs to be returned by PM (I'll send it again) if you'd like this poem to be included in our polling on April 21st.
http://forums.mosaicmusings.net/index.php?showtopic=10064

Looking great!
~Cleo

Hi, Lori, thanks for checking. Sorry for sulking. :D

Yes, you and others have done marvelous
job on my poem.It's totally different now.




Aggiel

Thanks for everything, Lori.

HAPPY EASTER TO YOU TOO!





Aggie

Hi Aggie,

This is a treasure to read and leaves a refreshing message of hope and appreciation for the most precious of gems in life.

Very encouraging!

Take care.
Lindi

Hey, Aggie...

I'm pleased to be reading this. If you're still sulking, go enjoy some of the things you mention, and that will be a great remedy!

Well-done and thought-provoking... and and Lori mentions, your opening is a grabber!

deLighting in your perspective, Daniel

I find your poem inspirational. It is filled with positive energy and encouraging outlook. Nature can be a replenishing force in our lives, your poem is exemplary of the many folks who find comfort there.

Sorry Lindi. I didn't expect this page to come up again after so long.
Thanks for bringing it up and the good comments.

Aggie

SULKING? Who will when it gets such good comments from you nd the rest.

Thanks a lot for checking in.

Aggie

I think you are new, welcome 4rum to MM.I am happy you find my
poem inspirational. Thanks a lot.


Aggie

A bright day to you Agatha,

No nits, just dropped in to say you wrote a marvelous piece.

Don

Hi Don,

Good to see you here. Thanks for commenting.



Aggie