Lanturne

The lanturne (or lanterne) is a five-line light verse evidently derived from Haiku and shaped like a Japanese lantern (hence the name) with a syllabic pattern of 1 2 3 4 1 syllables. Sometimes described as a half-cinquain there seems to be no particular requirement for subject matter, though the original intention may have been a statement of nature.

Generally, each line is a self-contained statement, such that the poem is not merely a sentence arbitrarily divided into syllables. Some suggest that the form should begin with a noun, with line 2 giving an action or description of the noun and lines 3 & 4 each giving a further description, and the 5th line offering another word for the noun, though not necessarily a synonym or even a noun. The form may or may not have a title, but it can be an integral part as the ‘sixth line’ of the poem.

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You have tempted me to try one on for size! Please critqiue and teach me how to make them stronger!

What is there to improve, Liz?

This looks like a lot of FUN Daniel.

All the examples are excellent (yours too Liz)! I also think this is like a 1/2 Cinquain.



Wonder if I should change 'dead' to 'ghouls' ?

Thank you for that nice compliment Daniel. I miss those cinquain threads we use to have... and this is a pretty interesting form to enjoy like that...

Hugs, Liz




Hi Lori...




This is very powerful. I would say it would work quite well for the introduction to Holiday poems of the same theme, and or seasonal poetry for Autumn! :)

This is a very strong example, is this your first one? ...

Hugs, Liz

Hi Liz.

Yes, this was my first Lanturne. I had All Hallows Eve on my mind. Thanks for your lovely compliment!

Addiction has begun!

leaves

flipping

turn yellow

'neath dog-ear'd tale

book

Buds

flourish

blanketing

stems with dappled

blooms

Ah ... Yes, I did try one on for size! Thank you Daniel for the lovely light to brighten my entry! I will have to do a few more of these ...

Best to you, Liz

You're welcome. I'd noted that you were about to review the params for the form, so I thought I'd offer another flicker to spark your re-entry!


Lightly, Daniel

Bulbs
blossom
garnishing
nature’s palette
Spring

Hey Lori,

This is very vivid. I liked how L1/L5 off set one another, bulb/spring and how you've allowed each line to grow into a whole image. For a very short form, you've painted a very crisp picture. :)

Nicely done. Hugs, Liz

Thanks Liz - I've posted this one for crits over at Shogun's if you have any further thoughts.

Cheers
~Cleo