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Jun 20 06, 05:49
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Ornate Oracle
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SPRINKLE WITH WATER Summer’s warm kiss exquisitely tenders seasonal charm’s delightful splendors. Plant seeds, watch them grow as sunshine casts it’s nurturing glow. Sprinkle with water, till the earth, endowed with vestiges newborn birth. Hummingbird’s lips vibrate lyrically hugging petals daintily, carefully. Warblers mingle splash and drink, perched upon birdbath’s brink. Sunflower’s yellow resplendent tones adorn backyard’s floral zones. Nature’s wonders created to entrall, liberate visions great and small. SPRINKLE WITH WATER Summer’s warm kiss exquisitely tenders seasonal charm’s delightful splendor. Plant seeds, watch them grow as sunshine casts it’s nurturing glow. Sprinkle with water, till the earth, endowed with vestiges newborn birth. Hummingbird’s lips vibrate lyrically hugging petals daintily, carefully. Warblers mingle splash and drink, perched upon birdbath’s brink. Sunflower’s yellow resplendent tones adorn backyard’s floral zone. Nature’s wonders, great and small liberate visions created to enthrall.
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Jun 25 06, 09:27
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Hi John, Such a sweet summer poem! The images are beautiful to imagine. Summer’s warm kiss exquisitely tenders seasonal charm’s delightful splendor. Plant seeds, watch them grow as sunshine casts it’s nurturing glow. Sprinkle {with} water, till {the}[dry] earth, or some other descriptive wordendowed with vestiges newborn birth. Hummingbird’s lips vibrate lyrically[,] hugging petals daintily, carefully. Warblers mingle splash and drink, perched upon birdbath’s brink. I love this image! Sunflower’s yellow resplendent tones adorn backyard’s floral zone. Nature’s wonders, great and small liberate visions created to enthrall. Lovely write! Cathy
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Jun 25 06, 10:06
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Ornate Oracle
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Cathy, Thank you for your suggestion of adding the word "dry", I like that idea and I may use that word or maybe a derivative of it such as arrid.
This was an easy, fun write for me, glad you enjoyed it. JLY
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Jun 26 06, 16:24
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Hi John,
You could use something like sun-baked (or just baked), cracked, packed (since you mention tilling it)...
Cathy
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Guest_Cathy_*
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Jun 26 06, 19:22
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Your welcome!
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Jul 9 06, 14:25
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Hi John. A charming response of nature's images mused from a times ten challenge! I've just a few stanzas that I've noted some suggestions below for you to ponder. As always, T or T. Enjoyed! ~Cleo [add] {delete} Summer’s warm kiss exquisitely tenders seasonal charm’s delightful splendor[s]. Hummingbird’s lips (do hummingbirds have lips?) vibrate lyrically hugging petals daintily, carefully. Sunflower’s yellow resplendent tones adorn backyard’s floral zone[s]. Nature’s wonders, great and small liberate visions created to enthrall. I suggest swapping the lines to: Nature’s wonders, created to enthrall liberate visions great and small.
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