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Apr 7 09, 05:42
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. . Movement by Moonlight. The harvest mouse, fearing the first bite of Autumn frosts, searches fruitlessly. Fleet - she lurches, shrivel boned, between the shaven stalks of wheat. Seeking out the final gleanings, sharp, beneath her hurrying feet. With luminous eyes, tail twitching,mute, the barn-yard cat - Pouncing! Her gaping jaws announcing her intent. Bright fatal flash of un-sheathed claws. She skyward leaps, feints in the air, but mouse-less, lands with empty paws. On starlight dusted wings, the Snowy Owl blinks slowly - once. Then glides noiselessly. Unseen - she slides, talons poised, her amber eyes keen, unblinking, Sharp focused on one quaking mouse. She downward stoops – her killing - clean.
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Apr 7 09, 08:37
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Leo, Awh poor mouse... I really enjoyed this, with the internal rhymes, the suspense, the form of the poem, every thing just fits together and does it well. I want to wait and see what others say, but if no one else does I will nominate this for an award. Steve
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Apr 7 09, 13:27
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Hey Steve - you really do, 'love those mieces to pieces' don't you? Many thanks for your kind crit.
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Apr 7 09, 19:33
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Leo, Hey logical question... if the plural of louse is lice; why isn't the singular of mice, moose? LOL LOL. Or better yet ...let me hear you all sing... EM EYE SEE (see ya real soon) KAY EEE WHY etc etc etc....lol. Steve
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Apr 11 09, 16:12
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I have nominated this for a Faery Award. Steve
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Apr 12 09, 01:32
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Good Morning JLY - yes, you are right. Shrivel boned could, indeed ought to be hyphenated - I will attempt to edit it. Many thanks for taking the time to read and comment on this poem. Leo
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Apr 12 09, 02:27
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Good morning Steve and and a very Happy Easter to you and your family. Thank you for your generous nomination - I have rarely recieved an award for anything, so will await the outcome with great interest. Leo]
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Apr 12 09, 09:10
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Congrats Leo on your faery award winning tile! Well done! ~Cleo
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"It's a dangerous business, Frodo, going out your door. You step into the Road, and if you don't keep your feet, there is no knowing where you might be swept off to." ~ J.R.R Tolkien, The Lord of the RingsCollaboration feeds innovation. In the spirit of workshopping, please revisit those threads you've critiqued to see if the author has incorporated your ideas, or requests further feedback from you. In addition, reciprocate with those who've responded to you in kind. "I believe it is the act of remembrance, long after our bones have turned to dust, to be the true essence of an afterlife." ~ Lorraine M. KanterNominate a poem for the InterBoard Poetry Competition by taking into careful consideration those poems you feel would best represent Mosaic Musings. For details, click into the IBPC nomination forum. Did that poem just captivate you? Nominate it for the Faery award today! If perfection of form allured your muse, propose the Crown Jewels award. For more information, click here! "Worry looks around, Sorry looks back, Faith looks up." ~ Early detection can save your life.MM Award Winner
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Apr 14 09, 20:25
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Hi Leo - Congratulations on your award. The owl and the cat could also pertain to human nature couldn't they? Similar to the turtle and the hare.
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Apr 19 09, 06:19
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Congratulations on your well deserved award, Leo. This had me sitting on the edge of my chair, waiting for the outcome. Well written, vivid writing which I thoroughly enjoyed. Snow
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May 6 09, 05:27
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Many thanks to John, Elisa, Merle & Cleo, for their congratulatory messages. No one was more surprised than I, to find a shield beneath my name! Leo
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May 6 09, 05:36
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Congratulations from Bev!
A wonderful poem! I enjoyed (?) every line!
Peterpan
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